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Memoir

The wind has blown for me a sweet serenade.

A bitter loving song on which my memories would soar.

 

A silent whisper of the tales I have come to see.

Telling the story behind my scarred vigage. 

Like a fine painting that only the painter may see.

 

A quiet memorial of times now long passed.

Where has the time gone my dear friends?

Has it been so very long since those times came and gone?

 

Or is it simply that I have become resigned to my loneliness?

Have I become so old now that all I may do is look back and remember?

 

(To be continued)

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Needs alot of work and a completion. Oh well

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  • FileMe
    July 23
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    For me, after the first stanza there was a little too much direct narration and not enough subtlety. You can imply without directly stating some of the things you were getting at. And I really liked how you interwove the nature imagery of the wind and soaring in the first stanza. The rest of the poem might benefit from continuing that usage.

  • Quite beautiful darling. It could do with a few minor tweaks, just punctuation and such, to help with the overall flow. But it is beautiful, dear. One of your best so far, I think. I truly enjoy watching your writing evolve.
    I love you, my dearest, with all my heart.