after walking barefooted across the broken glass
i numbered all my bones
wrapped my body in
sack-cloth and
hot ash
did it all for you
my love and
now you look at me
and laugh
and respond
i did not love you before
and now look what you did
your feet are bloodied
and i just cleaned and scrubbed
the floor.
A contest entry
- To show your pain/love by Riftkin.
600 points, ended July 29, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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WOW this is a very powerful peace of poetry, i hate how when love takes place the other person feels it more than the other person does/and thats if the other person feels it at all
great write
-rosie -
wow, I like this very much, especially the first stanza. Really powerful poetry here. Looking forward to reading more...
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powerful words. nice write.
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This one here had a slight undertone of humor at the end.
Thank you for entering my contest.
Riftkin
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Hello!!!!!
Now that is called true love to do that. I don't think too many would endure it though. A pleasure to read. Brought a smile. Best of luck. Hugs and Smiles.
Blessings, Sandy
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Wow, this was amazing. The imagery was amazing, the whole poem was just fucking amazing. So much emotion.
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i feel the pain in this poem. fantastic write!
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great stuff
he strikes again...a great poem and just when you think you got.....he kicks you in the teeth so you have to read it again lol,,,greatt poem...keep well and keep churning em out my mate......eric
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ah...this is a great piece!! I loved the last few lines...you have penned an awesome write here. thank you for sharing it. good luck with the contest. peace and light, kp
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