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First Kiss

WindChimes melodiously enchant the air
DreamCatchers alert
Incense cones delicately fragrant

Ms Snow Owl two-steps on the Gazebo railing
Chimaera Snow Cat purrs softly
My brilliant Garden flowers sway

Dancing, we are in Paradise
His arms provide a warm embrace
Our steps a magical connection

Laughing softly, we stop our dance
Looking to the tea on the table, thirstily
He holds my hand

I note a brightly wrapped box in a chair
He laughs and says, "For you, my lady"
Inside are several exotic plants

I hug him and he gently embraces me
Our eyes meet and our lips shyly touch
Our first kiss, new dimensions to explore

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  • Eusebius
    September 7
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    Lovely, and sooo exceptionally romantical! I fine write! Loved it!


  • CelfistJett
    August 13

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    Nicely written, with great vocabulary. Your punctuation is interesting, though it's a little confusing when you break and continue with the sentence, and change up your writing style by breaking and starting with a new sentence, without any indication. Other than that, I can tell when you are running on with the sentence, and I'm able to get the gist of what you wrote, which ultimately isn't a problem. Great imagery, good flow. A good piece!

    • Lady Dragonwyck
      August 14
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      Thank you for the comment

      I am glad you enjoyed this write. And, appreciate my vocabulary and imagery.

      Lady D


  • Cynthia
    August 9

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    Excellent

    I have always been amused by your writing my dear friend.
    You have a fabulous imagination, when it comes to writing.

    There are a lot of your writes, that even I, got inspiration from.
    And I thank you for that.

    Well done my dear friend.
    Well done indeed.

    Keep up with the great work.
    keep on penning.
    Thank you so very much for sharing your wonderful and creative talents with us.

    *S* Cynthia


  • bana bini
    August 9

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    wonderful poem

    Your imagery was beautiful, and your words were so colorful, it was nice reading it aloud too. The moment was caught perfectly, and I hope to read more.


  • Moonlightdragon gold member
    July 25

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    Shuch a tender moment you have captured so well
    i love this "Chimaera Snow Cat purrs softly
    My brilliant Garden flowers sway"
    Cats are so intune with our feelings

    Robert

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