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One Of A Kind

 

 

 

Little did his Mother know, when he was just a lad
that Ben would grow one day to win the fight;
he was such a little boy, he made his parents sad,
for he was small and weak and had no sight.

He was blessed with family love, but spurned by many souls
who didn’t understand his special needs,
but even as a child he had set himself some goals
and his heart grew ever stronger through his deeds.

Though blind he had the courage to join in any race;
in classes he could outshine all the rest,
he wrote about his life and trials and how he kept the pace,
by adulthood he proved he was the best.

His children were the luckiest and stories he would write
of all the pictures deep inside his mind,
blindness was no handicap, his heart was always light;
unique, Big Ben was just one of a kind.

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • hawkeslake gold member
    October 13

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    A lovely little story, Sue; makes me wonder if you actually knew a "Ben". It is so important to find what we can do, instead of what we can't, and to recognize the same in others. Well-done. Lita


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      October 13
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      Many thanks for your comment Lita ... I didn't know a Ben, but I have known a few people with a disability and have always marveled how well they cope.

      Love
      Sue

  • You can't always judge people by their outward appearance. There are always layers, always strengths that they have. You've captured this in your tale. It's a unaffected prose style which fits the subject. You had a message to impart and you did that successfully and unobtrusively.

    One confusion for me:

    His blindness he would overcome and joined in any race

    Do you see how that is a little disjointed? maybe, "...and he would join in any race" or better yet, something that explains more fully like, "...and he had the courage to join in any race." Something that better explains your meaning there.

    Big Ben did indeed seem to be one of a kind and it was a lovely story.


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      August 3
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      Thank you so much for your comment and suggestion about that line, I have since re-worked it and I hope it has been improved.

      I'm so glad you enjoyed this poem.

      Sue
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  • Ellis gold member
    July 31

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    Lovely -- and Encouraging

    I would think, since he was small, that calling him "Big Ben" would be like calling a big rotund man "Slim."


  • Eric Marsh
    July 25

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    mm

    a nice poem there is no thing as a disabilty we all have equal measures of abilities...a nice poem..keep cool


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      July 25
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      Thank you eggsy for your comment and I agree with your words ... we are all capable of so much

      Sue
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  • deercatcher
    July 24
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    the soul is the light of the world...


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      July 25
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      Many thanks for your comment Ben, it's always a pleasure to have you read my work.

      Sue
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  • Great stor telling, there aren't enough Big Bens in this world.

    J

    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      July 25
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      Thank you for your welcome comment Jade, I hope you're keeping well.

      Sue

  • A lovely write, and very moving Sis.

    A grand read too

    hugs

    Jem

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