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expectancy theory



she aimed
her slingshot wish
above ursa major

and, with fingers
worked to the bone,
dug a poem
in the dunes of sky -

but from her
acid-eye evaluation
a grain of salty truth
never missed:

with only a
dream-scented arrow

she's taking down the stars.



Author notes

for Polly - happy birthday!

One thing I admire about you is how you always aim high and always go for and accomplish your dreams, so here it is. Keep it up!

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  • Polaja Greeters member
    July 25

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    I really love this poem the ending line is my favourite and I'm more than a little chuffed that you wrote this for me I also loved the part that Rowan pointed out - this poem has wonderful imagery in it thank you for the beautiful poem, and thank you for your author notes I'm seriously grinning from ear to ear!


    Polly

  • Rowan gold member
    July 23

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    "dug a poem
    in the dunes of sky -"
    loved the allit. there. Really a great write!