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Cotton Candy Suicide.

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Cotton candy suicide  

death by pink excess
sugar rush as worlds collide
sweetened to obsess.

Death by pink excess
running from a cloud
sweetened to obsess
wearing taste bud shroud.

Running from a cloud
candy coated dreams
wearing taste bud shroud
thinking of ice creams.

Candy coated dreams
rhapsody complete
thinking of ice creams
death seems oh so sweet.

Rhapsody complete
sugar rush as worlds collide
death seems oh so sweet
cotton candy suicide.

 

 


Author notes

The Challenge:
Write a Pantoum using the picture above as your prompt.

Picture Prompt & Credit :

http://4.bp.blogspot.com/_3ARH8IYvn9U/SCZatKYLmUI/AAAAAAAAAB8/zg6a834hO8g/S1600-R/DeathByCottonCandy.jpg





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  • BuriedTreasures silver member
    August 8

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    Excellent Pantoum (Very difficult form) you have composed---Great take on the prompt and flawless flow to the unforced rhyming verse.
    Well-deserving of the Gold Award!
    Congratulations!


  • annother gold member
    August 8

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    I really love this write. I think you did extremely well with the form, rhyme and flow are great. Thanks for writing in the originally asked form. Best of luck in the contest.

  • Susan E. Pennycuff
    July 24

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    This is really quite the unique take on the prompt dear.
    I am not a fan of the pantoum form but that doesn't mean that I can't
    find beauty in poetry written in it. ( It just means that it is not one of
    my favorite forms and I choose not to write in it... lol)

    I can say that I love the pharse: cotton candy suicide as it goes really well with your further stated phrases of candy coated dreams and death seems oh so sweet.
    You really did a great job of matching this picture and your phrasings well. I often times
    just cringe when I read pantoums because people get so caught up in the repeat phrasing that they forget to make the poem make sense... you didn't forget to do that, it makes perfect sense and meshes well.

    I wish you the best of luck dear in the contest.

    Suzi

  • Papagallo
    July 23
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    An interesting take on the picture. I love coton candy and get some when I can; which is once in a blue moon. I imagine suicide by cotton candy would be a sweet death. What else could one due with such a Pantoum. It is really a bit different, Good luck in the contest.