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~ Hope~

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

I‘ve walked down

roads of loneliness

　

 

 

and watched,

lovers in their stolen

moments.

　

 

 

 

window lit

where families gathered

only deepen my sorrow

more.

 

 

 

 

 

But never

thought or dared to hope

to feel.

 

 

 

 

Or hear such words

oh how they grace my
soul,

 

 

 

 

To tremble

at your will.

 

 

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  • DeAgon
    November 22
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    excellent

    loneliness described with such tenderness and insight

    well written


  • Cup-a-Joe
    November 20
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    Simply beautiful. No other words can describe it.

    Joe


  • Debra A Baugh gold member
    November 20
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    this even has its own flavor.....venturing in loneliness, sorrow, stolen moments, hope and ending in sensuality in a subtle way......awesome..................LP&H


  • Wandering Woman gold member
    November 9
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    Very Lovely

    Even though the tone is wistful, the words flow softly with a heart filled with hope, beautiful!


  • Jesann gold member
    October 28

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    A poem of deep emotion, beautifully expressed.
    A little sad, but the ending lifts it into the realm of possibilities, that can bring new experiences, hopes and dreams, perhaps previously viewed as unattainable.
    Great write.


  • mgmc gold member
    October 27
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    A beautifully constructed expression. Very nicely and skillfully written! I like your formatting too!


  • Melee Vau gold member
    October 24
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    poem on love and longing - very emotional piece. great write!


  • Camille Morin gold member
    October 22

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    How do we ever leave the memories behind? How do we see beyond our crumpled psyches? And yet, we find love -- not what others would see as love, but feels like love to you and me.

    Your poem has touched me deeply, Rend. Bravissimo!

    Love,
    Camille


  • Lady RocknRoll
    October 21
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    Loneliness is a terrible thing. Nicely written


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    October 16
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    I am convinced that to be alone, without human contact, is a fate worse than death.

    Powerful words my dear.


  • PoetessA.L.OPrunty
    October 15
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    Oh! So! Beautiful!

    This piece reminds me of Hans Christian Andersons book title, "The Little Match Girl" except in a different light...Wonderful portral of "looking from the outside in" in relation to "LOVE".

    A. L. O'Prunty


  • Ken-Maverick
    October 3
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    Just lovely.
    Wonderfully penned indeed Rend!!!

    All the best.

    Ken


  • Roland Welles gold member
    October 3

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    Wow... This touched me so, being a lonely soul much of my life, regardless of it be by choice or self-inflicted... You use so little and "hugely" convey what many, many feel on so many different levels... I've often passed a home with lit windows that I know contains a family I know and wonder, why don't I have that... that... What's most revealing and sad about such thoughts is that it is usually only ourselves that probably keep us from that... SIgh... Just the other day I crossed a beautiful, old covered bridge and thought of Bridges of Madison County, and had thoughts of wanting such love... This reminds me of that particular feeling and so many more similar ones in my life... Well, well, done... Thank you so much for sharing!!!

    Peace,
    Russell


  • penman gold member
    October 2
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    Excellent

    What an amazing write. You shared so much in so few words. And did it so well. Thank you for sharing


  • PoetessA.L.OPrunty
    September 17

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    Beautiful Piece

    It seems you and I have shared paths, as I can truly relate to each line...Loneliness, in my opinion, is one of the hardest lessons we'll ever learn, but also a time of growth and reflection.

    A. L. O'Prunty


  • zappa gold member
    September 14

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    This is a very hard emotion to bear, without thinking a little -a lot. everyday, in a movie or on a song, riding and striding along the heart-felt pain that coasts right along with it. great poem even though it hurts me to read it and remember; yep, great dam* poem.


  • toomysterious
    September 12

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    A well known and far too well traveled, but where would poets be without it. It is the fire that fuels our soul. You have written wonderful words here. Thanks for sharing.


  • individuality gold member
    September 10

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    a good poem, ah to travel the times, the roads of loneliness and sorrow, it can be ahrd, but there is always hope, it never leaves, and when the sparkle of love shines, the heart and soul soar.

  • Topnotchsy
    August 23

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    At times watching others who have what we want most can be more painful than anything else, as we truly see what we've been missing. Nice write!!

  • Eusebius
    August 12

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    Spares and fine, full of sadness all the way until the final two lines, and then the "hope"!! nicely and deftly done...


  • JamesHardy gold member
    July 28

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    Rend,

    I like the emotional sparseness at first and the hope promised in the end. I played with the spacing and slight rewording below to see if visually a greater sense of emotional poverty could be evoked. Let me know what you think. Nice piece.

    Jack

    I

    Walked lonely roads
    Watched lovers' stolen moments

    Winnowing lights of families gathered
    Only deepened my sorrow

    I

    Never thought to hope
    Never dared to feel

    Hearing your words
    Would grace my soul

    I

    Tremble at your will.


  • brocken soul
    July 27

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    super

    this poem was great i loved how it was spaced out and the emotion was great i like emotion in poems may u pleas look at my work ive just started and ihave a few spelling mistakes


  • Xx.Toxic.xX
    July 27
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    an amazing write! i love the way this is written, it conveys so much emotion in so few words. glad i found this piece.


  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    July 27
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    Excellent

    A very fine write, indeed. You have expressed your thoughts quite well. Thanks for sharing this poem one with us. Again very well done.


  • Garmond gold member
    July 26

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    I felt a chill when I read this... there is a sense of being forever seperated from the warmth of comforting, safe love... then your last two stanzas seem to suggest that the seperation could be dissolving... through an invitation into or an opportunity to experience such peace or belonging.... acceptance still felt or seemed tentative though.
    I fully accept that I am likely to be a million miles away from your intended message or actual inspiration here Rend.. but I do like to share what I felt and what I saw.

    Always intriguing and always a pleasure to read you.


  • Daizee silver member
    July 26
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    Your last words gave me goosebumps


  • AngelBellerose gold member
    July 26

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    so much said in so few words
    longing for the same as the rest
    to have a love a family
    to feel this love

    you have penned such and awesome write
    deep in though and mind
    touched me with your words
    feeling hugs dear sis so well said
    always Angel♥


  • awannabepoet
    July 26
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    This poem only gets better each time you revisit it, most excellent write indeed.


  • solzhenitsyn08
    July 26
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    HOPEFULL POEM

    Is yours. It makes us comprehend the pessimism here as never to obey the paradoxical sayings like "never tjought or dared to hope to feel"!
    Thank you poet!


  • hebsis
    July 26
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    so much said with such economy of words and beautifully expressed emotion. I enjoyed it.


  • hawkeslake gold member
    July 26
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    You have a lovely flowing way with words, and your feeling is conveyed so clearly. Very well done. Lita

  • black is black
    July 25

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    Ahh loneliness is dreadful isn't it? It only makes you treasure those moments spent in loving arms even more. Sad and touching write. I hope you find some happiness soon Great write! Thanks for sharing.


  • Bri-luv-joyy
    July 25
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    aw, that's pretty yet sad. love it!


  • jessicabuzz
    July 25
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    it made me feel peaceful and sad, i love the emotion in it and the last line tyes it up wonderfuly, great piece


  • Rick Weston silver member
    July 25

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    truly moving piece, expresses the ache felt well. i also like the spacing as we walk with you as if with each step another expression of this pain is revealed.

    Thanks for sharing.


  • aanika
    July 25

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    'roads of loneliness'

    that's an amazing image. i loved this piece. your diction, imagery and flow are amazing and i really enjoyed reading this. thanks for sharing.


  • aanika
    July 25
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    'roads of loneliness'

    that's an amazing image. i loved this piece. your diction, imagery and flow are amazing and i really enjoyed reading this. thanks for sharing.


  • DeJaBlue
    July 25

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    Such a sad, but beautiful write. For some reason I pictured a sad young girl peering into the window of a house, with tears rolling down her hope filled eyes. I don't know why I see things the way I do, lol...
    Wonderful write, sweetie.


  • BlankCanvas500
    July 25
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    beautiful

    loved this. very emotional. a beautiful write. very sad, very deep. but truly beautiful =] nice name by the way =]


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      July 31
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      thank you so much for stopping and commenting,
      your suport and encouragement is a blessing

      Rend


  • awannabepoet
    July 24

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    It pains me to read these words Rend, you know at times I feel like family is nothing more than a morbid illusion for the hungry souls, something for thier minds to savor when all hope rests upon everything tied to the race we must endure day after day.

    I like it, I like it so!


  • JinSays gold member
    July 23
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    Wow.
    Beautiful.
    love,
    jin


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      July 25
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      Oh Jin,
      thank you so much for stopping by,
      your support is a treasure coming from
      an esteemed writer like your self,
      many blessings & love to you

      Rend


  • penman gold member
    July 23
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    excellent

    Oh my you crafted your words so well. Such powerful emotions. Thank you for sharing.


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      July 25
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      thank you so much for your comment and support.
      as always a welcome pleasure

      Blessings

      Rend


  • Deceits Tears silver member
    July 23
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    Sad but 0hh so beautiful
    I love how you can express so much emotion

    • Rend the Veil gold member
      July 23
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      and after reading your work, your work is a Master Piece!!
      i say Bravo

      R


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      July 23
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      thank you so much for stopping by,
      your comments are like treasure to me

      Blessings

      Rend


  • Away From the Sun
    July 23
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    I agree with PerVirtuous.

    So fluid, so natural - but succinct and honest, not a wasted word. Wish I could do that. I yammer and never quite get to the feelings behind my words.

    I never reach the point.

    You do this with beauty, love and grace.

    You are blessed, my sis...God love you.



    Debbie


  • PerVirtuous
    July 23
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    Your words float down the page like feathers.


  • jazzcat gold member
    July 23

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    Sweetly succinct and honest. A very pure piece of writing. You show great passion in all your work.


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      August 15
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      Dane
      I do beg your pardon,
      as i have dropped the ball on
      returning the favor as you have shown
      great patience, Thank you Dane,
      for all your support & encouragment

      Blessings always

      Rend


  • Glasyalabolas
    July 23

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    Very beautiful and very easy to relate to, though loneliness can still strike unwanted and by surprise, even when you are in the midst of the most loving moments, when you are secure, comfortable and within the deepst and most intense feelings and emotions of love.

    Loneliness is as skulking, opportunistic trickster, though it teaches us to cherish all the more those moments and hopefully inspires us to fight all the more never to loose them.

    Good write.


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      July 23
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      i know, as you have expressed to me and I so related my friend,
      it is a very sad place to be,

      Blessings to you always

      Rend

  • friend
    July 23

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    lovely...i've experienced just this from beginning to end... nothing like it to walk out of numbness and into the arms of someone who wakes up your being who you surrender all your feelings to good and bad and they bring you back to life.


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      July 23
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      yes you would know this well,
      and when i read you and your work
      i see such a Beautiful Poet, who has
      trudged in the mine fields and has overcome
      obstacles that were so unreachable,
      you are a blessed friend to me

      Love and Blessings

      Rend


  • Swangrnv gold member
    July 23

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    WOW

    The power in your words is undeniable! wow, this is sad..but hopeful..and so stirring..loved this stunning piece sweetheart..


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      July 23
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      Thank you so much,
      and my heart does sing with gladness that your back,
      you are a blessing to me my friend,

      Blessings

      Rend

  • Bob Fox
    July 23

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    Rend

    A heart wrenching gem. Such eloquent sadness expressed from a fabulous poet. Again, just excellent dear.


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    July 23

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    Aww honey you do bring tears to my eyes at times
    I felt this so much
    the sadness watching in the lonely streets..
    best wishes to you always
    Julie


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      July 23
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      Julie,
      i guess watching others live is the loneliest times in ones life
      but todays always a new day,

      Blessings & love

      Rend

  • Cup-a-Joe
    July 23
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    Sigh,
    This is so very well writen.

    Hugs,
    Joe


  • Xianaria gold member
    July 23

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    Beautifully done ~
    I can feel the sadness & loneliness in the beginning of the write, and sense the transition to hope towards the end.
    "Oh how they grace my soul" ~ lovely phrase.

    Blessings ~
    Tim


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      July 23
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      Thank you Tim,
      for your comment & applause's
      always a pleasure

      Blessings

      Rend


  • Rose Angel gold member
    July 23

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    You give the vivid image of yourself looking on with your own dreams of love, and someone has touched your heart, and is affecting those feelings...Tenderly penned as always so creatively... mom


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      July 23
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      Mom.
      thank you so much for your comment,
      and a sweet scent it is

      Love & Blessings

      Rend


  • Cannonsfire
    July 23

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    Sounds submissive here, as if you want to bend, I have known love like this...it's hard to detach it. C


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      July 23
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      Chez,

      you can always seem to figure me out, in a snap!
      thank you so much for your comment and applause's

      Blessings & Love

      Rend


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    July 23

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    You have a unique and beautiful way of presenting
    your work on here. A well written piece filled with
    a lot of emotion in it. It's great to read you again my
    friend and I hope that you are well. Take care and
    thanks so much for sharing your heart with us all!




    Jeremy0826


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      July 23
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      Jeremy,

      thank you so much for your comment & applauses,
      they are always encouraging and a treasure.

      Blessings

      Rend

      • Jeremy0826 silver member
        July 23
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        You're very welcome Rend!
        Take care dear and have a wonderful one!



        Jeremy


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    July 23
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    nicely done.

    love Tory


  • Nom de Plume
    July 23

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    Ive been walking them all my life too... nice write, be nice to have someone make you feel this way...


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      July 23
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      Thank you so much for your comment
      they are always appreciated

      Blessings

      Rend

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