You thought that you owned me,
You thought I was all yours.
You thought that you could push me away
Whenever you got bored.
You thought I was a possession,
An accessory of sorts
You honestly thought that being with me
Was just a hobby or a sport.
You never gave me freedom
To think and and free my mind
Then again, I must admit,
Your false love made me blind.
You may be sweet (When you want to be),
You may have a pretty face
We may have made a cute couple together,
But I was always out of place.
The one I was meant to be with,
The one that was made for me
Was right in front of my face the whole time,
But because of you I couldn't see.
I was so stupid, thinking you cared,
Thinking that you were the one,
You never even deserved a second chance
When everything's said and done.
I fell for your tricks more than once,
I stayed with you far too long.
You thought you could keep me from being with him?
....You thought wrong.
Author notes
This poem is about a guy named Chris. I dated him on and off through my last couple years of high school. He would get tired of me, toss me aside for a newer model, then when he was bored of those, he'd come back to me. I was stupid to keep taking him back time and time again, especially when the guy I was supposed to be with was right there. In the end, when Chris left me the last time, my best friend Roger was the one to put the pieces back together again, and I couldn't be happier with him. So, this poem may be about Chris, but it was written for Roger, my hero.
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Gah, always in the middle I feel like I want to stop. >.< I'm sorreh Kerry.
The third stanza, gotta change that last line. xD make it more... attention grabbing. Also the third line in the forth stanza is off with the wording, maybe put the word "We" in there instead of "I" and "You".
Good thoughts expressed here otherwise, you did get the message across. -
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Thanks Jakey, that really helped ^_^
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You never gave me freedom
To think and and free my mind
Then again, I must admit,
I was a little blind.
The haste of writing helps when the thought process is accentuated by mistakes made.
The double and in the third stanza adds to the sence of frustration being poured from the heart just as in real time.
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Okay, seriously, wrote it in like 5 minutes. Needs a little editing, but I think it gets the point across well enough. Thoughts? Suggestions??
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