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Voided

A perfect void left, the spirit still lingers
cashed in, we've all gone away
how silly to think it wouldnt be missed.
not the material i'm looking for;
it's lacking.
ask and you shall receive
thats all it takes.

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  • Acronym
    July 23

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    ello mate! s Top haha its been awhile...well, very short but it says alot..even though I havent slept yet, lol a little tired and sleep deprived, I really enjoyed this piece. The words seem to flow so nicely it makes me lol I love it! It twas Marvelous! It seems to have that spunky-ness that I like to put into my writes although my writings have changed quite a bit..(i think) and its been awhile since I've read any of yours...I truly missed it! You need to write more I would like that
    Awesome Job!
    Cant wait to see more
    -Acronym/Chris