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Tick Tock

(and so he kissed the pretty girl with the broken lipstick smile;

--and he promised he’d be careful if she’d stay just for a while)


          because it never really mattered that she’d broken all the rules

    and that she'd tied mistakes together like a  rope of hanging fools

so he told her,


…drowning is just singing using water as your voice

            and she remembered

lies can taste like sorrow if they don’t give you half the choice-

          he promised her the sky and then he sealed it with a kiss,
  so she kissed the wilting petal that death brushed across her lips,



‘it’s a good thing that’s behind her, all that matters is ahead.’
            But when her smile was broken, then what matters is what’s left



she couldn’t find the part where he looked her in the eyes,


    (i swore you’d almost said it, but wouldn’t ruin the surprise-)

            Despair is just a method (when he wants you to be tame-)
(Forget the burn he gave you, and just charge it to the game)


            He knew he’d never leave her, but she knew he’d never stay
            so when she can taste another woman it’s not cause for her dismay;;


and the world will keep on turning, with or without the ticking time-


            but when he tells her that he loves her,

why is it all that’s left to say is
                        “Fine.”?

Author notes

Based on the unbelievably true story!

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  • kill the lights
    October 16

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    pure genius.

    I especially love
    so he told her,
    …drowning is just singing using water as your voice

    this is amazing. <3

  • A beautiful and romantic poem.

    To begin with I loved the title and how your brought it into play later in the poem. I also like the story it tells, and the smooth flowing way you tell it. You have chosen just the right words to give your readers some lovely images, and this piece evokes strong, heart-felt emotions. Very nice work. I really enjoyed it.


  • The Observer
    August 14
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    Wow

    That was Great! awesome write