tonight i shrink
till i am my own poet: the
scent of rain on earth
that grows younger
with every shower
Author notes
quickie - like REAL quickie, just snap and BAM! will remove after contest/extend/edit.
In a list
A contest entry
- quick contest -- smells musty by Cat.
669 points, ended July 25, 5 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Such a model to reflect on
I love how this is short yet the meaning is so smooth ... The beginning makes me think of when it pours it cleans out the pollution, each time further bringing out the marvels of the created material, the soil etc. "the scent of rain on earth that grows younger with every shower" -- The mirroring of this metaphor to yourself as a writer is extraordinary because over time, we should keep cleansing our style, becoming more pristine, until revealing where we should've began. I also appreciate what, "musty," implies, that the smell of the pen flows more freshly.
Congratulations on silver, though I think this is also worth gold,
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wow
you do shrink..signs of humility or some unknown scare..what is it dear....and you cleanse....with every shower...so beautiful aml poem...loved it....I have many on my apge may be you may like to visit me -
wow!
beautiful write dear
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pretty
peace to all ~flight
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thanks!
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wow. i am in awe namita. you are beautiful. your words - so beatiful. wow. speechless. like seriously.
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thankies =]
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LOL....i feel like deleting my earth and rain poem now from your contest.
what an amazing thought, yes, that smell seems to grow younger and younger.
congrats luvvy - this is amazing. you do have a gift...
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this came so quick, i almost hated it y'know
i love you so MUCH
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lovely,lovely,lovely
I am proud of you Namitha
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wow.
pure brilliance.
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yes
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thank you
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The "the" in line two seems awkward. But I start there, because I have no other critique. You are so brilliant.... diamond shiny front store skyscraper brilliant.
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thank you, and congratulations to you
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awww this doesn't need any edits. It's absolutely beautiful just as it is. Nothing wrong with a short poem.
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that's so sweet! Thanks, Nicole
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you are a bit of a gift to the world.. do you know that?
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that is so special, coming from you
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reliving myself comes to mind
and the mind forever young
does not grow old with the shell
perhaps I am in stages of life
where the eyes see inward
love your little delight namita
you are that brilliant smile
we always want to wear
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this is so precious so SO precious y'know
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you just keep it here, because it doesn't read like a quickie... it just shows your incredibly talented poetic eye!!
~ Nicolette
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aw thank you Nic! I do hope you're churning out something for my contest!
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You are a brilliant young mind Nami.
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liar!
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But it's twu!
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i will NOT give you my new 100-colour sketch pen set! NO!
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Oooo sounds nice, have you made any purtiful pictures yet?
I’m an artist too ya know. I sketch, paint, sculpt etc.
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i painted mona lisa and all these stupid 'no-sense-of-art' people think it's a stick man on four legs!
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Nuh uh! Pffft! What do they know anyways!
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don't remove! it's utterly beautiful.
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Thank you!
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Awesome job. Hope you do well in the contest. You rock, kid.
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there you are!
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Don't you dare do anything to this, it needs no more than be the beautiful poem that it is C
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i was a little unsure because it came out too fast, and i haven't edited it much thanks C
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Some things are just right the way they are
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Don't remove this. I think I'm in love with it.
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don't cry..it isn't that bad, is it?
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Oh it's bad. And when I say bad, I mean baaaaaaaad in a good way. You know what I mean?
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Ohhh, I like this piece a lot, Namita. I've always enjoyed poems about the art & craft of writing poetry. This has such a sense of insight, enlightenment & acceptance. Yes, to become your own poet...what a concept. Good luck in Mary's contest, Sweetie.
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aww thank you so much, Wanda!
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