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~Two Hearts As One~



The tender touch of your lips

Into my heart,

Your love then ships.

Feeling as the center of your world,

Your queen

I then become

As love like ours, I had never seen.

Your love fullfills my heart

As with one word

All my pain drifts away

And my love is then cured.








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  • Alex Fitzpatrick
    August 21, 2009

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    Very lovely.

    You have a wonderful gift for expressing feelings of love for another. I am quite moved by this poem, how it flows, and I like your word choices.

  • Titus gold member
    July 25, 2009
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    A lovely write Grace, and like all your writes, there are amples of feeling. Lovely read. Tony.


  • melphleg gold member
    July 23, 2009

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    If only people would truly love in a way that esteems the other more than themselves. I think this speaks of that kind of love. She is treated as a queen and as the the center of the world. Love can healing many things including pain. But only one love truly does that. Jesus love truly heals our pain. Even the love of a spouse is secondary to this love.
    I read this and ache for you because I know you've been hurt by false love and your heart feels empty.
    The poem reads well. I only have one correction/suggestion. Maybe use "slips" instead of "ships."
    Great to see you writing. Your heart must be feeling love or at least dreaming of love to be writing such love and passion filled poems.