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Problem

Once there was a man
who'd tried to type poetry
In the shape of  a
Beautiful woman's tight ass
But he couldn't write the poem


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Tanka
A Japanese poem of five lines, the first and third composed of five syllables and the other seven.

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  • xPink-Lotusx
    July 23

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    Hilarious!

    One suggestion.. Only one thing I see that could use some touching up:

    Change the first word of the second line to who'd. Being a contraction of who had, rather than who have.

    You have some amazing ideas dear friend but you just need to touch it up a little. I found this piece to be very entertaining and humorous. Just cause my mind is twisted like that. Well done. Keep up the good work!