i lost my love awhile ago
where it it went,i don't know
and pain doesn't seem to go away
the sunshine is gone,heres another rainy day
i smile to keep from crying
i'm gonna live to keep from dying
i promise myself i won't hurt no more
i'm closing my heart to you and locking the door
from now on i'm gonna stand strong
not gonna live another sad song
i'm gonna live longer
live stronger
while your kiss blows in the wind
happy days are coming i know
someone wants me,i have a place to go
they make me smile and laugh again
they're something special,i call them friend
when we're together,yesterday is no more
cause today my heart will soar
things are different,now can't you see?
i'm happy now don't worry about me
cause from now on im gonna stand tall
i'm not gonna think about yesterday,not at all
cause happiness is in my heart
my new life can now start
while my love flys in the wind
A contest entry
- Rhyme. [Collaboration with Amy114] by Antebellum.
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This has a lyrical flow to it and an easy rhythm. Thanks for sharing this with all of us.
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hummm... to be honest I find most rhyming to be forced. This one to be honest is no exception. However, rhyming aside... I do think that this one has good emotion and feeling in it.
One side note... I think you used the word I'm way to much.
Thanks for sharing this with us. All in all a nice write. -
Very much a song lyric here . The rhyme scheme is managed quite well though I'm not so sure about the rhythm of the piece.
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A very tender wite about how you are feeling. To bad I can't manage to get into that place in my life. I am going tinot another relationship but this one is just a good freindship. With physical banefits. *shrugs* not looking for a "love" relationship now as I am in the place you were a while ago. Thank you for sharing.
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