outside cafe DADA
on rue des lapins sauvages
primal thunder growling
lightning hissing
storm beast howling
savage rain clawing trapped windowpanes
sidewalks
windswept neon pools
whipped blood reds
bruised blues
broken umbrella soaked strangers
running zig zagged for cover
inside
roaring fireplace
amber glow
despite dangerous weather
bustling with the avant garde
celebrating life
laughing
drinking
eating
discussing art
music
poetry
philosophy
politics
social theory
side by side in our secluded booth
capuccinos sweetened with amaretto
virgin white foam oozing over decadent brims
sliding unto sticky fingers
licking mine
licking yours
erotic intimacy
deliciously evil
wanton eyes penetrating deeper
deeper
kissing
kissing
long drags on unfiltered gitane cigarettes
intoxicating oral fixation
drugging sex-crazed brains
rebellious bliss
irreverent hedonistic rapture
mind obsessed
passionately transfixed
seductive teasing taunts
deliriously wicked laughter
aroused belly fireball
streaming molten
downward
craving
craving
stumbling back to our flat in the slashing downpour
wild night writhing in featherbed wet with sweaty lust
drunken ecstasy
tantric shadows flickering on walls lit by jasmine-scented candles
empty wine bottles hover dizzily on the edge of an end table
hastliy discarded clothing scattered in a trail from the door
carnal madness oblivious to a heaving morbid world
chattering masses
distracting everpresent incidentals
temporary mini tragedies
endless spin and spoil of the anti human
What did you think
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Mind obsessed
Definitely...
your style of writing is yours alone....
"wanton eyes penetrating deeper"
Mysterious... LOVE it... -
You have SO manipulated the reader here. Your phrasing does exactly what it intended and each part has it's own personality. I wondered where you would go with it...but the point at the end, the idea of an escape from what you paint as a dismal, impertinent reality just kind of hits you, straight on. Wonderful effects here.
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grand writing, dear poet! a poem distinguished by its clever thoughts and fine imagery. radiant and true, this poem is an inspiration!
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A fine poem, from start to finish intoxicating.
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This one really slaps you around and spins on those temporary mini tragedies.
I'm imagining how you will perform this.
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Awe struck
Excellent write, I love how the reader is thrown into it from the first words, great job here, I really enjoy the raw emotion and imagry that comes from this piece, you really connect to it quickly and hang on every word until the end, Very captivating, complex, and structured. Brilliant ryhme and rythem, here, BRAVO!
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