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The new girl friend

My new girl friend
I stand by,
and i will defend her
or at least a'll try.
I will surrender to her,
give her all that I've got
couse when it comes to me
I care not.

To see you smile
is my number one purpose
not only underneath
but also on the surface
big wide grin
butter flies inside
your here with me
our feelings cant hide.

As nights turn black,
darkness a mask
you need anything
please just ask,
with the distant sun rising,
in the new sky blue
in the end of it all,
I'll always see you.

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for my new girl friend Jac

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