I wish I could understand.
Why I feel this way.
Why when I wake up each morning.
I wish it was the end of the day.
I don't know why you left me.
That I'll never understand.
But I still remember your last request.
A promise that iv kept for you.
You promised me something in return.
But you broke that promise before it was made.
So why do I keep my promise to you I ask myself?
Its because I love you so.
I wonder what the reason was to you leaving me!
You said you still love me but im not good for you.
I always new I wasn't good enough for you.
I told myself that each day.
I understand why you left me.
Though I dont understand why you love me.
That's why I wake up each day.
And dwell on the past.
.....I miss u
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This is a very heart-felt poem and i think you writing is very emotion filled. I connect with it within the first two lines. I can relate in some ways, maybe not a lover, but someone whom i loved and felt abandonned by. I do however, want to make a personal suggestion if i may, and that is that you are good enough to be loved and anybody who see's otherwise does not deserve your love. I don't know you but i imagine like everyone else you have great qualities that make you, and everyone else lovable. Do not let someones actions affect how you see yourself or the way you live your life. I know, much harder to do than to say, but that is something i am dealing with too. Dwelling on the past will only limit your future. and you deserve all the best. Amazing poem like i said before, and i really enjoyed it. Keep up the great writing. such an amazing expression, don't stop!
great job!!
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After the third line I would put a comma instead of a period. Other than that I think that this is a very heart felt poem with loads of emotions in it. Sometimes our feelings can confuse us a lot and sometimes mislead us. But the best you can do is try to figure out which way we are being guided by our hearts and the hearts of others. Great write, keep it up!
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Great
I can definatley understand and realte to this poem. It puts on paper what most of us feel after losing a loved one or after a breakup. I enjoy it because it assures me that i am not the only one feeling this way and that i am not alone. I really like the area where you talk about keeping a promise. Promises are meant to be kept, but what do we do when the one we promised it to isnt around anymore? I've wondered that myself many times over. -
a piece that many can relate to, well written. good luck and hope it works out
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i definatly can relate to this.
i hope things turn around for you though
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i understand what it is like to dwell in the past - it is only a half life. writing helps though, right?
my favorite part of this poem is:
when I wake up each morning.
I wish it was the end of the day. - because you are touching on something universal - i think everyone could relate to feeling this way at some time in their life.
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