Touch me one last time, I miss all
that we had when we were one.
Hold me close though I now know what
you have done can never be undone.
Let me feel you kiss my lips and feel
as if it were still my once upon a time.
Let my heart be as one with yours again in
flawless, beating rapture. Keeping time
with your heart in perfect ryhme.
Let me know that you still love me as
never before.
Reach again for me and never let go before
I leave forever, slamming the door.
Let me feel that perfect happiness as we once
knew,
the pride that I felt when I belonged to you.
Let's walk down the street hand in hand one
last time, if only for the moment.
It wouldn't be a crime!
Let me pretend those hurtful words were never
spoken,
that my heart had never been broken.
In some ways my heart still reaches for you,
but because I can't trust you again, these
desires have been hushed and will never come true.
So hold me once more, promise me that
you will think of me, and I promise you that
I will never forget what we had before.
Please stay with me and hold me,
even if just for the moment,hold me once more.
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Does it protray the sadness that I feel?
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wow i love this poem it shows a lot of emotion. I love how you used sweet words to potray your love for that person and it does potray sadness it shows somebody whos truly in love with someone but just knows you cant be with that person because of how it ended. I could relate to that poem so much i know how it feels to love someone and missing them but i know deep down its never gona be the same too many hurtful words spoken and you cant it back but to let go .. Thanks for entering my contest this poem touched me x
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A truly emotional poem which certainly told me how you longed for a love to hold oyu onece more, one last time. I have read the comments below and cannot comment on them as they obviously know you better than I, but what I did see were people they love and care for you so much and undertsand your pain, but they are also right. Love sometimes moves on and we need to to. I have felt your pain and have also let it go because it only drags you down. Somewhere out there is a love that is meant for you. You are a treasure as I have found since I have been here and you are one that is always there for others. I adored the poem as sad as it was. Thank you for sharing and sieze the day, my friend.
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p.s.
It should be "Let my heart beat as one" not "me". Learn how to spell, woman! English isn't your second language! Or is it?
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Of course it portrays the sadness you feel. I often feel that sadness myself, but in a totally different light, as you know.
I don't know how much you want put here, where everyone can see, so this comment will be one of my shorter ones.
A word of admonition: don't act impulsively, like you always have in the 5 years I've known you. Take the time to truly think it through, as objectively as you can. Keep God in mind while doing so, & pray hard.
I can't voice how worried I am for you, how often I send up little prayers for God to keep His hand on you. Besides, you have to find your own way back. It's not something you can be forced into, as I well know.
Always, I love you. No matter your decisions. You are the bestie given to me by God, & I will always be grateful & love you. Even when your decisions fill me with worry & pain. Even when you're mad at me. Even when I'm mad at you. Even now.
Since you seem to forget it so easily, allow me to lovingly reiterate: you can ALWAYS talk to me! No matter what it is, what I'm going through; none of it matters as much as our friendship. The ONLY one who trumps you is Nugget Head. As he should. But even he isn't far above you.
I love you, Chica. Always.
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Howdy Chero!
Yes, this write did portray mucho emotion.
I believe that everyone, minus demon spawn, have entertained the notion of having that old loving feeling just one last time, so I know exactly where you are coming from in this piece. Your work here is done...
-Mark
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This is where you an I differ, I never think shit like that but that's just me, it will never happen again so therefore for me I'm a bit cynical with this poem even though its a great write with lots of emotion and sadness. I see no point going through more heartache and feeling that you want him to hold you close one more time. Sorry I was so harsh with this poem sis
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