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Griswolds Bitching....Again

"You cocky bitch"

he repeatedly screamed out

"You cocky bitch"

Deserving of the leather switch

Welts a tease but this isn't 'bout

sex, with bruised ego he'll shout

"You cocky bitch"

 

"Fuck you asshole"

if you only allowed me in

"Fuck you asshole"

I only seek to strike your soul

To follow closer than a twin

in hopes to get under your skin

Golds in my hand, guess where I been?

"Fuck you asshole!"

 

 

Author notes

Oh this is too fucking funny. This came about cause Griswold enter a PDK contest and well, I cant win gold cause i have over 200 so, I told scott I will let him win the gold, because i had to after he said OH SHIT after I read him my piece (thats worth Silver right there) then afterwards I said, I will allow you to have the gold, cause i have no choice lol...He said "You cocky bitch" now that was worth gold.


TOO FUCKING FUNNY

DONE IN RONDELET FORM

Rondelet
The Rondelet is a French form consisting of a single septet with two rhymes and one refrain:
AbAabbA. The capital letters are the refrains, or repeats. The refrain is written in tetra-syllabic
or dimeter and the other lines are twice as long - octasyllabic or tetrameter.

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  • hate2lovelove2hate
    November 25
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    LOL a good write, thank you for sharing. I had never heard of Rondelet form, so it's nice to pick up something new


  • Parth Sawhney
    November 15
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    good job..loved it..was somethin very new n interesting!


  • Sector-Hunter silver member
    November 6

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    Hahahahaha I loved this. Your not cocky or so I have seen but then again I could be wrong lol. This had me rolling thank you for that. SH


  • davidugo
    October 13
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    great job

    indeed i love this.


  • Wandering Woman gold member
    September 19
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    Superb!

    I learn something new everyday as to the type of verse written!


  • Sgt B
    August 18

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    Hahahahah

    Great one to find first thing in the morning, Thanx for sharing this one Tory1 *still laughing*

    ~Ron~


  • poeticweaver gold member
    August 1
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    You two are a trip.


  • Rick Weston silver member
    July 31
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    too much fun.


  • StormxCrow
    July 29

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    Haha pretty funny this one! I've read a couple rondelet's around here but this one made me laugh. great job!


  • Riftkin gold member
    July 27
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    This is funny, and thanks to you, I have stumble upon a new form. I am no where as good of a poet as you. You have master quite a few forms.


  • white stone
    July 21

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    This is hilarious. Imagining Griswold calling you a cocky bitch is highly refined entertainment. This is like some kind of demented singsong. If I had pics of both of you I would make a goofy graphic for this. What a song to read first thing in the morning.


  • cheaphotelsign
    July 21

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    that was nice....kinda felt like i was a fly on the wall...a voyeuristic-ish treat for this reader...if that makes sense to anyone besides me
    love the attitude and the "inside" of it all...hope that makes sense too...lol well done all around!


  • Griswold silver member
    July 21

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    Uh huh, I expected as much after you fell out of your chair in laughter when I said it. This was done very well honey, the form molds itself nicely to your ministrations and manipulations. I still love ya though. Scott


    • PassionsPromise gold member
      July 21
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      hey it was fucking funny

      cocky bitch..sorry fucker lol

      • Griswold silver member
        July 21
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        Hi, my name's Sorry Fucker,
        my ride is purple, I'm a trucker.
        I hear your handle's "Cocky Bitch"
        with swingin hips and happy lips.

        • PassionsPromise gold member
          July 21
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          My handles too hot to touch
          against my skin against your clutch
          no thank you I dont need a trucker
          I already have one fine ass fucker

          who can roll up his sleeves and give a pucker
          and allow me to indulge on a all day sucker
          too many fuckers slip inside them dirty britches
          he has the best, I am Cockier then all them bitches



  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    July 21
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    You want I should take care of this Griswold? LOL

    Nicely done.

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