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Ascension.

When heaven stepped
on sapphire steps
through a veil
of stars to
you,

did you stop to beathe,
my love,
when she gave
her hand to you?

When that gentle light
eclipsed your heart,
did you remember
who I was?

But I could not save,
I could not hold
the one that
I loved.

So she ascended,
and I am again
but one.

Author notes

To one that I have known. To the one that i loved.

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  • Mrs. Mautino
    July 23
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    Leave it the way it is, it is blunt yet so moving