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Cotton Candy Clouds

 
 
 
Sunflowers of yellow gold
and peach trees along in rows
our naked feet we dipped in the creek
a kiss of wind was upon our cheeks
 
Thick blankets of tall green grass
that we both sat on back in the past
billowing clouds filled the afternoon sky
looked liked cotton candy to our childhood eyes 

String fishing poles you made for we two
we got muddy clothes and we wore no shoes
a waterfall cascades back from that time 
pressed between the pages of 1859

Close your eyes now dear, is it me that you see
a short haired brunette smiling bright and free
you tousled my hair, as I looked up to you
a punch in the gut, I gave you one 
or maybe two

Treasures from a lifetime we will always keep
for as it is said still waters run deep
Life in the south Amen it will be
together forever
My Johnny Rebel and Me


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Simplicity and Peace ....In another place, in another time....

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  • Beautiful

    A touching tale of tender chldhood love blossoming in the full gaze of adulthood..

    How I wish me and my love
    To forever bask in the elixir of youth..

  • piccola silver member
    July 22

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    I was taken by the graphic. It is lovely and goes with the write very well. The tone is set, and the reader knows not only by the title but by that which is seen, that the read will be gentle and soft (which it is.) Punched in the gut eh? nice job and thank you for entering.

  • Bountiful~Beuatiful...



    Outstanding imagery and rhythm of an inspiring magical romantic story make this "Cotton Candy Clouds" a masterpiece.

    In admiration,

    Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU


  • csmmoms2
    July 21
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    It's so soft your cotton candy dreams...a real treasure. -c

  • Cheysula
    July 20
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    excuse me while i empty my tear ducts...
    [sobsobbawl]
    cool. anyway, gorgeous write, doll.


    • Dixie Dawn gold member
      July 20
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      Thank you soooooooooo much truly!! The tear ducts made my night that I so needed! Love, Dixie

  • division
    July 20

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    Oh, this poem made me speechless. I love how you wrote this and how the rhyming wasn't "forced". It flowed beautifully like silk. You took me through a journey, with such original, yet amazing imagery that I've never read before, so with that, AMAZING job and good luck in your contest!

    • Dixie Dawn gold member
      July 20
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      Truly I am so grateful and humbled by your wonderful comment, I was just writing away without thinking, traveling to a better place and time, so glad you went with me!! Thats the best reward...Love and Light, Dixie


  • Ellis gold member
    July 20

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    Dellightful

    This took me right outside to your fishing hole -- which is pretty good for one who is housebound by Parkinson's Disease.

    • Dixie Dawn gold member
      July 20
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      that is the greatest reward I could ever have, to take you on a journey, it has made me tear and choke up to know so, thank you so much for telling me, and for sharing this with me...Much Love and Light, Dawn


  • Rheea gold member
    July 20

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    ok you have me crying like a southern girl would . I love this I want the picture and to frame it I want to have my friend Tammy do it in water colors and have the poem with it. not enough for us is written like this .


    • Dixie Dawn gold member
      July 20
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      You humble me my sweet, whatever I have in my soul to write is yours...from my heart...Love, Dawn

  • *sighes* I found a tintype in the house today .. this reminds me of it

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