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Water's Leap

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Water's Leap

 

 

 

 

 

 

Now, it seems the clearest suicide.

The Bad River leaps off the cliff

as if it knows what dire flavors

lie in wait miles and weeks below.

 

My mother's veins are shot full

of evolutionary cyanide.

Gravity will claim these waters,

replace trout with carp; with

garbage; with coagulated

junk food.

 

The lexicon of water over stone

will give way to voices of shit;

to the ooze of sludge words,

mud words, words that must

wear boots against the future.

 

It leaves my legs to find those

of oil-rigs in a salty gulf.

 

It makes me want to leap.

 

 

 

 

 

 

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The picture is Brownstone Falls, on the Bad River.

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  • Rowan gold member
    August 27

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    Congratulations rob!!!
    A societal piece that speaks for all. hugs

  • tessa poetry
    August 26
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    I love how you took a beautiful picture and added the city's garbage to it and still you wanted to leap off. great poem it deserved gold. enjoy your points... excellent job!!!!

    I love your poem and will look up your site for more

  • grm
    July 24

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    i won't be happy until the whole planet is paved in concrete and nature is just a nostalgic memory broadcast on TV.

    of course, that's only because i'm a large stockholder in the new company, Soylent Green


  • Rowan gold member
    July 21
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    Amazing. So strongly written. I loved that ending.


  • Cat gold member
    July 21
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    wonderful. yep.


  • Heart Sutra
    July 21

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    Yeah, I feel you...how dare they (the ones we love) go and leave us behind in this earthy place trying to work throughthe grit and spit, the pains and gains.

    Ironic but my father was the same age as Julien when he died. He played a guitar, never kept a regular job, had a string of sugars to hold him together, went deep for heroin, a gifted person...in a hotel room he did himself in. I just happened to notice this parallel.

    Anyway, sigh...enough said.

    Your poetry is amazing Rob. You know I just love you.


    • just rob gold member
      July 21
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      Perhaps only you know just how much I identify with both, but some of us must remain to clean up our messes. (or try, anyway)



  • onerios13
    July 21
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    It leaves my legs to find those

    of oil-rigs in a salty gulf.



    It makes me want to leap.

    Breath-taking. Simply outstanding in scope and voice. This had the panache of a kite floating 15 thousand feet in the air, yet had the anticipation bred in the suspense of watching a single bead of water ready to drop into eternity.

    But yeah. Don't leap.


  • Night Hope gold member
    July 20
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    "The lexicon of water over stone"

    This is such a great line, dear Scribe. But don't you dare leap. I haven't been swimming in years. I'd have to do a swan dive after yer ass & drag ya to shore. Good luck in Darcy's contest, my Friend.




  • Peteskid gold member
    July 20

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    we ruin little but ourselves, make our own place in the pond unlivable, nature will continue; the planet seems not to need us on its journey across the void, ecological justice denied... is just us denied...PK

  • Your words are full of power and angst. The images you bring into play are primal, and the way you bring me from a waterfall that looks pristine, all the way through 'mother's veins' to oil rigs in a salty gulf is amazing poetry.

    Your final line makes me weep - I'm starting to comprehend that we, the ones who see, have an obligation to the world, to do what we can to reverse this rot. Yet too often I too want to leap - but like a salmon, to find the unspoiled place where young can be raised in peace, where the old truths are not thrown out like covers for junk food.

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