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a piece of chocolate

as you finish the chocolate
you know it's over
but you can't help to want some more

the rich flavour
that melts in your mouth
makes you shiver

you bought it in Berlin
and you don't know if you'll ever go there again
you know that you can't have any more

the lonely feeling
that empty spot on your tounge
and your eyes have nothing to look at

the brain says
- maybe it's for the best -
- it's the only way it could be -
- it's logical -

but the heart
living in a fantasy world
doesn't listen

the heart is prepared to travel to Berlin
just to get another bite
but it's not going to happen
the mind has made a choise

there is  no more chocolate

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  • baawri
    July 22

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    Beautiful

    Hey Lingon, I love to be the first one to comment on the brilliant piece of poetry written by you. Reading I also felt that I had also been missing my loved flavor of chocolate. Where is it now !!.. Delicious poem... Enjoyed it so much.