Don’t try to take me away
The wind takes my sins
And brings them to the sea
Where the soft waves makes them disappear
Don’t take me away
The rain falls from the sky
Rinsing me clean of my regrets
And plants them in the ground
Where beautiful flowers grow
Don’t try to take me away
The clouds make shapes just for me
Heaven calls out to save me
Don’t try to take this away from me
It feels good to be this free
--20 July 2009
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it feels good, yes indeedy...thanks for your entry and good luck to you
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The repetition gives a lot of depth of meaning to this wonderful write! Loved it~
Love and light,
Frogz~
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one word..hope.
i enjoyed it, much.
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very nice
this is a wonderfully strong piece.. i love the imagery...Don’t take me away
The rain falls from the sky
Rinsing me clean of my regrets
And plants them in the ground
Where beautiful flowers grow
PKO
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Don’t try to take me away
repeating this, made this a very strong piece.
Wonderfully written,
good luck -
I like your repeated and unique use of natural entities to purify your soul...and to grow beautiful flowers. Good work!
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Good thinking,Its really nice..
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Yes, really good, 'all sins removed', and a 'new' person emerges. very good write.
Regards.
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I really like how you integrate the nature themes with the sensation of freedom. Very fitting. Really enjoyed this!
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