Everyone can see the scars on my body,
but there are other scars that no one sees.
Failing to be the white knight
for the ones that I love and
care about.
Not being the kind of man
that I think that I should be
for my woman.
Watching someone die and wondering if I
could have done something more
to save them.
Failing in my marriages without really knowing
the reasons why.
There are so many things that the
people around me take for granted
that I can do, without question.
I just hope that my hidden scars
don't get in the way,and that I
let them down.
Please tell me what you think
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Sorry it took me so long to comment on your poem. The sight went down last night.
Not sure how I feel about this one. It seemed to lack a certain emotional meaning. It just seemed cheesy and overplayed at times. I guess what I'm trying to say is their was noting special or dramatic about this. Nothing really stuck out. I think you could have reworded some stanza to make them more bold. -
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This was written about my boyfriend,who is 52 years old and has a lot more life experiences than you have. He's reflecting on his past and trying to learn from his mistakes. You are too young to understand the meaning behind this poem. Also you gave no reference to what stanza you think should be rewritten. I also take great offense to you calling this write in your words " Cheesy and Overplayed," maybe when you grow up and have the kind of life experiences that my boyfriend and I have had then you might be able to appreciate this write for what it is and not what you think it's not.
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Not sure If you read what I wrote but here is what it said. Fill free to go back to the contest and read the original statement.
"So with my older contest's I have been rather nice and sometimes didn't speak the whole truth about how I felt reading the poems. This time I'm not holding back. Please remember that your the one who entered my contest and don't take offense to my opinion."
Thank you and have a nice day.
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your scars may be hidden but no one can really know you unless you let them see them scars .only then can them scars heal i thought that this was very nice and you can tell you put a lot of your self in to it bless it be peace
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this is so deep and touching...great job..pleaseread and comment back
and i love the title
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