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Lost

dark empty collums, the black aura covers all
i walk through the darkness, hopless, helpless
i look around and wounder, "how'd i get here"
"why'd i get here", im a good boy, well sort of
im not bad that is, the blackness engulfs me
death stalks, "gulp", i try to catch my breath
but no air is to found, franticly i try another time
once again i fail, drop to the ground, repet
i look up, the leathal shadow has struck
behind the deathly figure is a dim growing glow
fear fills the shadow as the light aproaches, it flees
safe, i catch my beath and inhaile the light, life
LOVE

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BORDOME STRUCK so i tryed to wright something off the top of my head "lost"
is the reasult of that

my first time, please constuctive cretics are greatly appreciated

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  • well alrighty then for just writing off the top of your head!! I couldn't do that! This was a delight from start to finish! thank you for sharing it. peace and light, kp