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Feast!

 

 

 

 

 

I lay here waiting for you -


my skin, soft and smooth
my flesh … almost malleable
awaits your lips

let your fingers
explore me -
my contours
my shape

close your eyes
breathe in my
heady aroma

allow my life blood
to quench your thirst
each drop to trickle
across your tongue
and be lost within

 

let me excite your senses


totally


before
you consume ...

 

 

 

   all

 

 

      of

 

 

         me!

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Pick any object and use this as your theme. It has to be a physical object, e.g. a chair, a fruit, a boat etc

It cannot be a place
It cannot be a person
It cannot be a feeling

It has to be something physical.

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Comments

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  • hawkeslake gold member
    October 13

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    Okay, WOW! I had go gulp a couple of times, since I think I started to salivate by the third line or so... hmmm... not sure I should even comment further. Great read! Lita


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      October 13
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      Hehehe ... just one of the ways my mind works
      Thanks for reading.

      Sue


  • Emmyb gold member
    August 19

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    breathe in my
    heady aroma

    allow my life blood
    to quench your thirst



    thats very sexy this is great.

    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      August 19
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      Many thanks for your comment, I appreciate it, it was a good contest.

      Sue

  • emily101
    August 18

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    I think that it was amazing.

    I loved it. I like the way you put so much feeling into your words.

    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      August 19
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      Many thanks for reading and leaving your comment, I appreciate it.

      Sue


  • Thomas Scott gold member
    July 21
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    Oh, yummy!

    Makes my fingers wiggle.
    Luvit.

    Good luck in that contest, Sue.


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      July 21
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      I apologise for making your fingers wiggle ... but I'm sure you enjoyed it

      Thanks Tom.

      Sue
      x

  • Purrsanthema
    July 20
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    You have made nectarines soooooooooooooooooo sensual!


  • arafura gold member
    July 20
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    Wow... are you sure you're talking about fruit? Very sensual work!


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    July 20

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    Oh, beautifully sensual Sue! The imagery is perfect and definitely gets the juices flowing.. so to speak lol


  • ceegeeess
    July 19

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    Apple of my eye!

    A look at you excites me
    A touch and feel is suffice
    Hold you in my hand and roll
    Keep you on my cheeks and lips
    Squeeze you not, nor teeze
    You are apple of my eye
    I want you all my life
    To give a new life again and again!


  • Nickelspring gold member
    July 19

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    Wow, that's one juicy peach (nectarine?)....
    Nicely sensual, love the form.
    Best wishes,
    K


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      July 20
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      You were right, I had just eaten a nectarine when I wrote this piece. Many thanks for your comment.

      Sue


  • cricketjeff gold member
    July 19

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    What is it with you and peaches

    Sexy and superbly wrought.

    Carved from the very "freshest" of fruit

    Jeff


  • Legend silver member
    July 19

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    Tu Tu Sue is this the sort of thing to be posting on a Sunday,? having said that i do love a lady who is malleable,lets me excises my arthritic fingers
    great piece

    PS if you are going to be consumed can you ask the one doing it to leave the hand that writes


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      July 19
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      Many thanks Richard for your comment ... I hope I didn't upset your Sunday Too much

      I will make sure the hand that writes remains behind ... maybe the Pen could make use of it!

      Sue
      x

  • Bob Fox
    July 19

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    My Sue

    Lately my poet friend you have been very frisky. Another delicious write that cause the reader to ssk out those wonders even if only in a dream. Always a pleasure.


  • Amera gold member
    July 19

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    Oh my! Hot, sensious, passionate. I guess I know the kind of mood you're in. I better tell your mother!

    Love,
    Amera♥


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      July 19
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      Hehehe ... nothing like a bit of suggestion, is there? I've just eaten a nectarine and written about it, I'm not sure what you are talking about

      Many thanks Amera.

      Love
      Sue
      x

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