he listened to her every word
As her eyes wept shallow tears
That ran down her rosey cheeks
Breaking like her breathe on the floor
He craddled her into his chest
Arms tight around her torso
that kept her from falling
being lost to fight alone
He wiped her tears from her eyes and arm
As from her mind she was being abused
Those words she didn't want to hear
Beginning to believe them again
He brought her into his world
As she did with hers
though the recoiled snake,
Bruised her arms as before
He gave her everything she wanted
And as she hugged her knee's, she
Thought about the times of
Being together forever
Author notes
Well i was thinking about David and ummm the punching fight me and mum had in Homebase, god my arm is bruised.
Its sort of love and random mixed together, i really have a bad writing moment but i published it anyway.
Help..! This needs so much work.
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AWW bravo! this is beautiful and sweet but at the same time really sad. I love this write only you have made two errors which are bugging me
I will help you out hun
x
"Them words she didn't wan to hear
Beginning to believe them again"
Ok "them" should be "Those" and you have made a typing error with want. hehe you missed off the "t".
A beautiful write filled with emotion and fantastic imagery
Kinda a mixture of prose and poetry
I LOVE it!
xxx
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Thanks for the help, ive swapped everything so it should make sense now.
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hehe no problem hun x
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woo you fcan feel the emotion of wanting and loveing him it made me have tears in my eyes
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i wikid liked this. so many images go through a persons head. its amazing. keep it up
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