In the event of my demise
Should fate see fit to close my eyes
Should time and turmoil steal my breath
And I be touched by peaceful death
If this, by chance, would be my end
Would I be counted as a friend
Or just a man you knew one time
Who left his soul within his rhyme
Perhaps, by passing, I would see
Some hint that you remember me
A little sign, a subtle clue
To justify my love for you
But hints are simply not your way
and signs were never your forte'
A fast good bye the only clue
To one who'd give his life for you
Or am I doomed to never find
That special place inside your mind
Some spot you frequent in the night
A corner hidden from the light
Where I am once again your king...
It honestly won't mean a thing
Nor will the hurtful words you said
Because, you bitch, I'll just be dead
Rakerman
Author notes
02...Something new I hope she likes
In a list
A contest entry
- Never Fall in Love :: I fell in love with your words. by xxRainbowDawnxx.
400 points, ended August 7, 10 entries
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This is why I can say you are hands down my favorite poet on here
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your flow is perfect
and you did a good job on this one
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AWSOME
This poem flows very nice. "Should fate see fit to close my eyes" I luv the choice of words in that line.
Although i personally think the first stanza should be the last creating a more impacting ending, the poem to me is still perfect. GJ -
Again, I agree with Ellis.
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ohh I really like this.
"Perhaps, by passing, I would see
Some hint that you remember me
A little sign, a subtle clue
To justify my love for you"
This part and the ending were my favorites.
thanks so much for taking the time to enter.
good luck.
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Veerry sweet indeed.
Can understand sadness, hope, anticipation, fusion of a lot of emotions here.
Nicely done. -
I really enjoyed reading this. It was very readable and flowed nicely. job well done!
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Nice rhyme there dude.
I enjoyed reading.
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Outstanding
This is clearly a real winner! Wonderful expert writing, gritty and funny -- A POEM TO DIE FOR
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oh man I love your poetry.I can relate to just about everything you write.I love it
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Hah
The end gave me a laugh.
That was good.
I liked the rhyming, and the smile it brought to my face.
It flower nice and smooth, and I just hope I read it like you would have if you were here to read it to me!
It was good
No, good is too low, this, this was fantastic!
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Has it ever been that you've written something that I don't like?
It's excellent!
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I love it
Unfortunantly I can relate to this, verry good write =)
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Wow. lol. Didn't expect the twist at the end. Everything leading up to it was so beautiful and formal and then... BOOM. Reality hits. Ha ha. Very good.
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Help me out here.. I can see that it's really well written, and the content is great, but I can't see why you threw it at this contest. Curious.
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i loved this! great right. I enjoyed the strong emotion which is there the whole way through.
i loved the last stanza the most.
Sinem
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