Look!
I want to share with you only
this picture, a special time of bliss,
a moment that poets and painters
and lovers dream of,
out of time, out of space.
Isn’t it strange?
There, where we send our kites
and larks sing and fly
the sky looks like a wide blanket of crumpled silk...
can you hear its soft, rustling voice
or is it only my imagination,
behind the double layers do you see
the remains of fading light?
Alone,
I sit next to the window,
night and silence fall upon my face
and I become a piece of the darkness,
only in my chest there is this place
flaring like the morning sun.
I watch and wait and wonder
when will this night without you end
and how long will I have to wait for a falling star
through the interstices of the wrinkled sky
just... to make a wish.
Author notes
Contest prompt:
http://people.artcenter.edu/~jsong5/thesis/index02.html
my response:
artwork: Falling star by Jelski DeviantART
http://jelski.deviantart.com/art/Falling-Star-81623329?offset=30
http://fc01.deviantart.com/fs27/f/2008/092/e/7/Falling_Star_by_JelsKi.jpg
In a list
A contest entry
- Pictoral Response by CarolDesjarlais.
1750 points, ended July 24, 3 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think...
Comments
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Oh, there where we send our kites...... how interesting that I wrote a poem at the ocean and I, as well, speak of something as silk...bravo! Absolutely stupendous writing..gentle, yes, peaceful, contemplative.....
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Just lovely Sonja
You put into words what I have felt at times and it would seem to me that you attained the kind of relationships in love some can only dream about. I am glad to believe that for you certainly are deserving. I truely enjoy reading uplifting poems like this you have written.
Jim
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Your next to last stanza is gorgeous, my Friend. The entire piece is a wonderful response to the prompt. Good luck in Carol's contest, Sweetie. 
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this is gorgeous. i love the part where you sit at the window and become part of night.
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SO TENDER AND SWEET!!!
The sweet memories and prayers of a person thinking of their loved one who is far away.
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