vomit on sidewalks after a slice
or the water that ran from her nephew's lips
and how part of it reminds her
of daughter and the other
of age
Author notes
i have a 6 year old nephew. i don't know if the poem if clear enough. will edit.
A contest entry
- quick contest--- melon by Cat.
700 points, ended July 20, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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wow
this is deep i
love it
if anything needs an
ii
iii
iv
and so on
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it's clear.. feels like it needs something though..
but i see it.. and i like where it is going
and certainly the language to take it there..
m
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I like it the way it is. Well done.
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Brilliant intrinsic piece.
Best of luck.
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