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Emerald Dreams

Beyond the dust and ache of daily grind
into the realm of freedom’s endless play
far past the restless heave of bluest brine
and at the eve of yet another day
is where my love rests patiently in sleep
in softest fields of lavender and green
where warm the butter glow of sun will keep
beyond reproaching eyes and never seen.
Beloved come to me and with me dance
the moon beams radiant in thy auburn hair
come lie with me and in my bosom chance
that lifetime in thy emerald eyes, my fair.
  But dreaming only shimmers till the dawn
  when daily grind returns and life goes on.

Author notes

Prompt:
Without sleep there are no dreams without dreams...

My first English Sonnet, true to form.

A contest entry

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  • hawkeslake gold member
    November 24
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    Lovely, and touching, pointing out the juxtaposition of dreams and daily grind. Well-done! Lita


    • Aelten
      November 24
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      Thank you! If only the two could come a little closer together...
      Khia


  • Aerden gold member
    August 10

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    I loved this for its beautiful imagery and its colors. Very nice sonnet. The line about the butter-glow of sun appeals to me.


  • FloridaGatorQueen silver member
    August 5

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    This is very beautifully written. I felt at peace reading this. It was so romantic too. I enjoyed the read!!! Thank you for entering my contest.


  • crivanea silver member
    August 4

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    Beautiful sonnet! Oh so lovely! I looked at your home page, only 4 poems!? Write more please this piece is quite tranquil


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    July 27

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    How very enchanting! I loved the soft and romantic imagery in this lovely poem...thank you for sharing the beauty of your words~



    Az

    • Aelten
      July 27
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      I hate how we can't rate comments with 5 whenever we want!!
      Anyway, thanks for the lovely comment, I appreciate it
      A~


  • Nymphetemine
    July 22

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    Well this write took me away to a different level.. Your write was sensitive and beautiful.. Thank you for entering my contest..


    • Aelten
      July 22
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      Thank you for the green shiny This was a fun contest to write to- great prompt!
      A~


  • Roland Welles gold member
    July 22

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    So beautifully written and felt with a dreamy tone and voice of its own... All images evoked by your word choice are perfect within and as the whole... I really enjoyed this... It relaxed, calmed, and gave me a dreamy feeling as I read it... Very well done!


    • Aelten
      July 22
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      Thank you so much!! I truly appreciate your lovely reaction to this
      A~


  • not krys
    July 22
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    this is beautiful.
    two lovers in a dream world.
    absolutely beautiful.

  • ecrivain01
    July 22
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    Ooops.

    I forgot the clappies.

  • ecrivain01
    July 22

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    Other than a few rather ...

    awkard lines here, this is quite a good job. I certainly enjoyed the read. The final couplet is often the most difficult part and it's where the form often breaks down, but you've done a very good job with it.

    All in all, this is quite well done.


    • Aelten
      July 22
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      Thank you, Im just starting out so Im sure there's plenty of room and time to improve.
      A~


  • LettersFromtheSky
    July 19

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    True to form and true to yourself as well I like this piece a lot. I envisioned myself being in that field, escaping life and just relaxing. Beautifully penned my friend.

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