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cause and effect

to be woman is a quiet ache-
our soft tears like pools
of abandoned ocean
create clay flesh
latched onto sighing breasts.

the sea unfurls,
mother of our own tears,
singing karma, karma,
as blue turns white turns blue
again until the blue runs dry
bleeding karma

and we will bleed with her,

new clay
moaning karma





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  • dabpunx
    August 30
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    oh how i know what i have done


  • Palas Kumar Ray
    July 28

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    Very deep.Much ahead of your biological age I suppose.Stunning.


  • crivanea silver member
    July 23

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    woah...I like the abstract quality of this ...so vague..but at the same time it leaves much to the readers' imagination...great write..sad..but it almost have a prophet-like approach...maybe it's just me..lol..best wishes


  • Budart
    July 20
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    Very nice poem. Deep yet simple and accessible. Bravo!


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    July 20
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    OH MY YES!!!! Very nice...it is!


    Az


  • Aesthete
    July 18

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    beautiful.

    i really felt this.
    i liked the repetition.
    it all just flowed to one directly poignant purpose. amazing

  • dx d by me
    July 18

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    This is spectacular poetry...perfect on the page. Powerful and deeply moving.
    Don't revise a thing, please let it live this way! Geo

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