A young girl,
Brave and questioning,
She walked a mile
Or two
To sleep in a wild cherry tree,
In fullest blossom,
In the moonshine,
Covered by enchanted mist.
A young woman,
Curious and learning,
She ran through a day
Or two
To live an innocent love,
In fullest blossom,
In the twilight
Of two hearts beating as one.
A young mother,
Loving and caring,
She took an obstacle
Or two
To embrace her family,
In fullest blossom,
In the glowing sunlight
Full of purity and love.
A young elderly,
Knowing and understanding,
She sat down an hour
Or two
To look back at her life,
In fullest blossom,
In the comforting shade
Of a young wild cherry tree.
Josi R.
July 17, 2009
A contest entry
- Prewrites(: by ladybug..
625 points, ended July 29, 103 entries
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Comments
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I like how this poem takes through the phases of one's life. The last stanza really caps it off well. You are such a deep thinker!! I'm on my way to read some more of your work!!
-Kendal
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Wow, Joey! This is SO poetic! I know, it's a poem, so it's supposed to be but in some way it's much more than that! I love how the story you're telling (the picture you're painting with your words) progresses as the poem moves on from stanza to stanza.
I don't know the name of this literary device you've used... how all stanzas follow the same "pattern"... but I love it, it creates such a beautiful flow within this write, it's hard to explain, I hope you get what I mean... and... "A young elderly"... fantastic oxymoron...
But I'm not going to dig any deeper into the "formal" aspects of this piece... because what holds it together is not only the form, but of course first of all the content! So tender and sweet... Reading this made me smile...
Thank you for sharing this with me!
Keep on writing! (I know you will!)
Annie
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