As thoughts of you consume my mind
and nothing else remains
I wander aimlessly through my life
numb from my heartbroken pains
I desire nothing anymore
without you I am a broken man
walled up in a prison of my own making
not wanting to ever escape, not even sure I can
It seems like forever since I have seen the sun
I truly don't even care if it rises again tomorrow
For my life seems doomed with gloom
shrouded in darkness filled with nothing but sorrow
I once held someone so precious
in my arms you became my dreams
my ever wish, and desire
my very reason for existence it now seems
I opened my heart completely
poured out all that loving mushy stuff
gave you all I was, every drop of me
but it now seems it just wasn't enough
How could I truly have ever thought
I would be worthy of you
I am nothing special
but my love was so very true
In the end it just didn't matter
I was not the one you would chose
and since I gave you my very being
It was all of me that I would lose
So now I am truly nothing
I have nothing, absolutely no desire
All curled up in my darkness
secluded from the living, I retire
I am doomed to walk among the happy
slither among all their smiling faces
living my life within the shadows
when it is over, leaving no traces
No-one will morn the lonely loser
no-one will even care that I am gone
what a empty existence
this path that lost love has put me on
Each kiss still tingles on my lips
every thought of you will eternally haunt my mind
I stole poison kisses from the lips of an angel
that seemed to kill me as it makes my life unwind
But don't feel sorry for me
FOR I ONCE KISSED AN ANGEL
A contest entry
- Make me cry by xXMe17xX.
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Wow this a very touching poem. It caught my attention your poem. Love the title of your poem too. Parts of it reminded me of that song called "Lips of an Angel". Your poem is really good and you did a great job. Also I love the way that you ended your poem. I hope you do wonderful in my contest and thanks for entering. Love and Peace!
-Jess
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Very touching and poignant
You write of your heart hurting but seemingly, at the end, you ask no one to pity you...excellent
Thank you for sharing; this is a fine piece! -
wooow lovly x
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thank you for sharing your considerable talent, dear poet! this poem is so very fine! shows work and dedication to your art.
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Intersting picture. Very pertinent it seems.
I have to say that I really do like this write. My favorite line in particular is "slither among all their smiling faces." It seems almost that you are becoming the perverbial bad guy of your story...but I honestly don't believe that is the case here.
You tell your story very well. Thank you for sharing it with us. And though you may have these dark feelings inside, I do like your perspective given at the end of this work. Bittersweet. But sweet none the less. -
this is perhaps one of the most beautiful and majestic poems I've ever read.
thank you for sharing
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Such a beutiful sad poem i like this very much!!!
Great job!!! -
Your sadness and despair comes through loud and clear. Well written.
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wow ..I loved each and every word of it,,,your piece is so truthful , deep and touching..it uniquely touched me that it almost brought me to tears.
P.S : the image matches your poem very well.
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long short doesnt matter good is good when one feels what one writes always good to feel ones work tells me i am still alive for now well done
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Is love Real?
Your words are good almost made me believe that love is forever, which i know for sure is not. Pain which you so nicely depicted is true...and then if not healed - it becomes stony....
I hope your pain and your heart heals soon. -
Ok, the picture was nice, and the poem was good. the last line was the best. I don't have a least favorite...
Unfortunatly I can't relate, cause I would LOVE TO!!!
The only thing I would change would be the length. It was a little long.
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this was beautiful. and im sure someone would miss u. this was breathtakeing. wow. great write.
~Divine~
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goood.... something strange in my belly! -
so good!
I wanted to cry! This poetry is so dark and heartfelt, I know exactly how you feel. This was beautifully written.
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it took my breath away, it was so beautiful and sad.
well done.
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this speaks so loudly of that dark place our hearts can go to when love doesn't go the way we thought it would. many will offer advice and helpful remedys...I always say the best way out is THROUGH...bite down hard and power through...you are much stronger than this one piece of heartache. you are already on the path to healing!! peace and light always in ALL ways, KP
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