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The neverending love of living side by side



Hic-ups resonating
and the sounds of fans so dreary
all of so soundly sitting
hustled
          down
                  the
                        stairless
                                      spiral
                                              since we have moved in
                                            the love seems spilled
                                            and our toasty emotion burned
                                            aloud

We wicked youth living life
switching spouses
singing in each others' houses
and dreaming





I didn't

dream
                          like
                                                wise
                                                                      men
               

                                      should.

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  • Junkyard
    July 21, 2009
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    wonderful poem..liked how you spaced the words in places..good luck in the contest


  • consternation imply
    July 20, 2009
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    COOL

    I liked the way you made the words look like stairs. This was honest and beautiful.