Pulling out slowly, looking all around,
Make sure you're safe, nothings to be found.
Just making a left but then there's a... BOOM!
I guess the other guy tried passing a little too soon.
Your body is a little shaken, as is your mind,
You pull off into the first spot you can find.
Taking a deep breath with a heart beating out of chest,
You are okay, and hope so are the rest.
Getting out to check on this unwanted stranger,
He is unhappy, and full of hot anger.
The first thing he inquires is "What is your age!?"
You sense the presence of a discriminating rage.
Now listen sir, if you would please,
You are quick to conclude, and do so with ease.
We should be happy there is no one to save,
Is a ripple off shore any less than a wave?
Reviewing the facts it is clearly your fault,
Why must you hide under an ageal assault?
Actually, practicing something for plenty a life,
Can engrave bad habits that don't go without strife.
I don't mean to criticize, but I feel I must say,
If not for your actions, this wouldn't have happened today.
Please stop wearing the societal cloak,
That a sapling is less than a great, mighty oak.
You may tell a story and your peers with you agree,
But merely because they're more like you than me.
Just because the insurance company will listen to you,
Does not mean that your biased story is true!
People will defend you if you're black or Asian,
What about me? Just a Caucasian.
No, I will not let you set upon me blame,
Until there is no more meaning to my name!
Author notes
I wrote this after I had a small fender bender with an older gentleman who thought it was my fault just because of my age. It was clearly his fault, as he was trying to illegally pass me (probably speeding might I add) when the collision occurred. Unfortunately, the insurance companies sided with him (or no fault), even when I had done nothing illegal or improper. And people say white males aren't discriminated against!
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Made me chuckle. "Dang kids, get out of my yard!" >:0
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"People will defend you if you're black or Asian,
What about me? Just a Caucasian."
I chuckled when I read that. This one is really good. It both tells a story and delivers a message. There is a lot of raw talent in there. It's a shame you didn't bring it out sooner!
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i love how this has got an bit of humour in it, not in a belly laugh, big ha ha way, more of a slight chuckle way.
this is a good thing, i assure you.
and your rhyme is damn good. it's not forced at all, which in itself is a gift.
the fact that it's not a pedestrain obvious rhyme makes it even easier to enjoy.
this packed alot of punch.
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thanks for the comment, im a somewhat new poet so i appreciate critiques and tips =]
i think the accident actually made it easier to rhyme because i was focusing more on the incident than the rhyming of the poem!
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