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When I sleep

When I sleep
I feel going so deep and deep
When i saw a dream
Its like in a bowl of cream
When i'm fright
I search for the light
When I sleep
I feel going so deep and deep

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  • zoralielda
    August 15, 2009

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    Nice use of rhyme.

    Only here's is a confusion: Are you fright or are you in fright?

    Again, it's a very good poem. Keep it up.

    - zoralielda


  • lukes
    July 17, 2009
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    Nice rhymes, I enjoyed this.
    Thank you for sharing it

  • Sky Prince Ireland gold member
    July 17, 2009

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    good

    Something I'm sure many relate to. Some are light sleepers, some are deep ones.
    Nicely expressed. Thanks for sharing.
    Brian


    • Michelle 2009
      July 18, 2009
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      Thanq soooo much!!! and thankgod u ppl liked it!!!!!!! but if theres some mistake than plz do telll me!!!!!!!!!!