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Kundalini Rising - (trochaic octameter) Unfinished

Kundalini, feel you rising, up the spine I feel you rising,
Rise up through each burning chakra, serpents breath a smell surprising,
Rise up, Rise up, feel you burning, rise up, rise up, I am yearning,
For the spiritual healing, before God I will be kneeling,
Rise up, rise up, feel you burning, rise up, rise up, chakras turning.

Kundalini, Kundalini, bringing forth the baggage clearing,
Rise up through each burning chakra, I'm a man of God be fearing,
Rise up, rise up, feel you burning, rise up, rise up, I'll be learning,
Gods divine plan he bestowing, upon me the plan keeps going,
Rise up, rise up, feel you burning, rise up, rise up, chakras turning.

Author notes

This poem is unfinished, and I am working on it. But, for now I really want feedback as what is good or bad about it. I know nothing is bad about any poem overall. Just need tweaking and maybe collaboration from those who have went through the Kundalini Awakening.

What do you think so far? Are you experiencing Kundalini Awakening? Feel free to collaborate with me if you are experiencing it yourself.

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
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  • expandwhatyousee
    August 11
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    NICE

    THEME!!!!!! Kundalini is a very powerful art