We started out amicable
peaceful
friendly
seduction set in
primal
intensity
appeasing every god of carnality,
igniting
sensualities
their formality does not matter
he poured me a philter
his phallus
being the container
my tubular flower receptive of his potion
weakness from arousal
to the very core of me
i became enamored with my paramour
this spiritualism
of hedonism
took credence and it’s
all i wanted
the more
he became my muse
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© Copyright 6/6/2009rmc
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I love this write. amazing. I love how you write a line and then use 1 word lines after and then use a sentence again...if that makes sence lol ha.
I like the lines 'Their formality does not matter, he poured me a philter.'
his is definately an awesome way to write an Erotica. Incredible...
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Ooooh nice!
Very unique and creative write here!
I VERY MUCH enjoyed reading this!
I wish you all the very bet in your writing endeavors!
Bravo and kudos to you!
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