use your waxen colors
on my throat of silence
dip me whole and naked
in a giant vat of rainbow
twirl me by my hair overhead
and watch the art I make
upon the plain blue sky
color in the spaces between
my toes with charcoal
trace my imperfect form
with fingerpaint and clay
....please stay
Author notes
prompt: color me
A contest entry
- Color me... by Sonja.
5000 points, ended July 18, 2009, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - For my FAVES only; please enter. by perfectsunset.
750 points, ended October 7, 2009, 64 entries
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Comments
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This was very beautifully
written.. I really enjoy
your language.
Best of luck & thanks for entering
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great
I'm reading these short pieces from you, which seem different from the others I have read. This is precise, just well crafted and the ideas, images flow beautifully. This DOES paint a very physical and spiritual web of desire and longing. Great chose of words and length.
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This is lovely indeed! There's so much to like! dip me whole and naked / twirl me by my hair / trace my imperfect form. Wonderful imagery, Coffee!
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Ohm I know this kind of art. Dip me whole and naked... I imagine your words and I smile for this idea. It could be read in many ways.
~Sonja~ -
Theimagery in this write is top notch.Your word use and thought process is wonderfull..I wish I wrote this, but I can;t..This is you..So good " On my throat of silence" WEhat a perfect metaphore.Wow.. The last two words in the poem are fabulous to the core.Great job on this..Thanks for writing it..Good luck..
John
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