My hand,
it quivers
as I set down
the weapon.
My lifeless body,
it lies within reach.
My beautiful green eyes,
they stare to me, in disbelief
as a shiver
rolls down my spine.
A tear,
it rolls down my blackened cheek
reflecting the pain/anger
I've instilled within myslef.
A scream,
it escapes my blue-tinted lips,
a.g.o.n.y
f.e.a.r
How could I let myself
get this low?
I no longer recognize
the smile,
it's now flooded with angst
The Victim;
Me
The Antagonist;
Me
The Weapon;
Me
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Comments
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wow very impressive
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this is very good.
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wow
this is a very good poem. If you think about it it really expresses a ton of emotion. We all fight with ourselves of internal conflict. Sometimes we wonder what to do. Sometimes we act. When we are fighting ourselves we can make some bad choices. I understand this. I can RELATE to this. THe end was my favorite part. It was so final and powerful. I think that a poem written this way entirely would be amazing but I am ot saying anything bad about this poem as it is. It is fabulous!I enjoyed it. Thanks.
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oh my goodness! this is wonderous. =] i really like the ending, i think it's a very nice touch. such a powerful poem.
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This is a very beautiful and deep poem. Incredible work.
keep writing
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thought-provoking
powerful emotions here. battling oneself is not easy, worst is when we lose. a constant reminder to always keep fighting to overcome one flaw at a time. great and realistic poem
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I love it, so easily to relate too, keep up the good work
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Awesome idea about self inflicted agony in poetry. You can hear the pain in every word.
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"The Victim;
Me
The Antagonist;
Me
The Weapon;
Me"
I just loved this part. Brilliant. =]
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