we were near enough
to hear the ocean
beat her arms
against the ground
and the rumble and crack
of rocks, loose in the sand,
slapping one another
like old friends in misery.
they slid away
with the tide,
and you slid
into me.
Author notes
somewhere beneath heaven
for him
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perfect. holy macaroni.
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i like the simplicity of your writes
love the personification of the ocean and the rocks
would love to read more of your work
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simply stunning.
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The quiet personal nature of the disclosure is just lovely. Beautiful writing. Geo
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i love this
sorry, but i have no criticism. it's simply beautiful.
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Aww I love the image it paints andhow it's obvious but open to interpretation at the same time. Simple, cute, and beautiful.
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