Old bum hangs out by the store where old men go
to while away the hours, lie about past glory, drink coffee
argue politics, talk horses.
Gas up my barn truck on colored diesel, wondering how come I thought this fuel would save money.
Always feel that bum staring at my legs then on up to my butt.
followed me in and out of that place, never saying a word,
old gray face so focused ever hopeful for a hand out to satisfy his addiction.
Sat down outside beside him with Reeses Peanut Butter cups,
he has one I have the other.
This old man is quiet the casanova.
Watch in my rear view mirror, another woman pulls in,
as he begins to start those loving ways all over again.
Author notes
Old Bum was a Husky mix.
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This is so sweet and poetically beautiful lass..
Always feel that bum staring at my legs then on up to my butt.
followed me in and out of that place, never saying a word,
old gray face so focused ever hopeful for a hand out to satisfy his addiction.
lol...fantastic.....
your comment is so valued knowing what a fine writer ya are
Bless your heart
little gypsy,
Liam
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you have such a wonderful way with animals-It relates your peaceful heart, wonderful tribute to old Bum...peace
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Hello Michael love you tell Mr M I love him
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wow, so do you with you own unique style and yes I love naughty and nice of course.. and the more freedom I get with the topic, the worse or better I become, but its that side of me as a woman do not want to loose for its all about fun, and nothing else...........and if you cant have fun,,,,with sex.....than what the hell am i going to have fun with work.....like what dishes laundry, cooking watching children four in fact, omg I would have lost it by now if it was not keeping that part of me alive, and I thank god I have it.....for play is not only for the young, its to prevent you from getting old, and why not......safe and clean, hot and senual right up my alley..........lol.........oh im just fooling around I had fun............thanks for the comments and peace and power to you................
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Beautiful, easy style and voice with a kind of wistful tone to it. This is such a touching piece. You are so talented.
Sincerely,
Camille
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This was good and very funny! I lauged the most at this part:
Sat down outside beside him with Reeses Peanut Butter cups,
he has one I have the other.
This old man is quiet the casanova.
Watch in my rear view mirror, another woman pulls in,
as he begins to start those loving ways all over again.
But it overall was good and it all made me laugh. Thanks for entering my contest and best of luck to you! -
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I am happy to make you laugh, he was a sweet old dog who loved peanut butter , chocolate and the gentleness of women in that order .
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Clever
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Nice job!
You did a splendid job on this piece. .I especially liked the picture. Thanks for the poem Rheea!
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Thank you
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Wonderfully done Sis...
Great observational narrative with vivid imagery that makes for compelling piece with an edge of reality that was quite endearing...
Impressive as always...
Keep up the good work...
Well done!!!
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I'm an old bum can I please get on that stoop and admire your butt? And other bits, I'm not choosy. This is a very witty poem and succeeds because of its lightness of touch and its reality.
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Haha...
Cute!
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first verse immaculate
seriously
"outside beside".. that's so me
and you I guess .. lol
this was tuning
'til the end but wan
post-climactic in the end
lmao
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mmmm try this one now this is you and me ...http://allpoetry.com/poem/5523877
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Love it...Woof!
You'll get that dog fat, along with his other lovers. Can he handle the rehab?
XG
PS If you hadn't explained............????
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I see my self in this. Drinking coffee, and watching the ladies.
I like that dog. Wish I had one like that.
Joe
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this is really strange
yet alluring
can't quite place it but love the curtness
very fine write
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I am really strange yet alluring... he use to look at my butt to see if I had treats in my pocket.. I am an earthy writer I miss old Bum
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Such is the life of an old dog sweetheart, someday I would aspire to be so lucky, enjoyable write. It put a smile on my face, tonight and I needed that.
Thanks Sis
Rick
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This has a perfect mix of comedy and sadness.
I love the imagery, very detailed.
Great write!
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Some old bums are full of wisdom, and they know how to really
treat a lady well....I often wonder why? Charm or Bull Hockey?
Just enjoy while you can...one day he'll be gone....to charm
some angels....nice write....
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I added in the notes "old bum" was a husky mix novy, lol I was not plain enough. Bum he was too for anything with peanut butter in it.Turn up his nose at milk bones like I can get those any time. Loved the women he did and played to everyone of us.
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aiyana
well I was pretty sure that was him in the picture
but; I saw the dog as a symbol of friendship...with a
bunch of old men spoiling him with candy,,,just as
you did....lol [you were plain enough]...but my imagery
tends to run wild....lol
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Damn, where did you get that pic of me? I gets quite busy down at that store sometimes; good thing my head still swivels without too pain.
Your poem made me feel both happy and sad, it's a gooder. By the way, when did you turn 100?
I love you,
Brazos
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Okay, so I like peanut butter cups. And other sweets.
Heckuva write sis. You've been payin way too much attention to the ways of men. Well, maybe you should now that I think about it.
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LOL, I did smile too. A beautiful dog, I love dogs of all kinds. thank you for sending me the link and making me smile, I was being too serious with myself just now and did need to lighten up a bit, but then my next write is going to be about the Holocaust and it is indeed a serious subject. thank you for this... Scott
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Lol
Now young lady not all of us are like this. lol But tis true for even though old we still enjoy the beauty of a young lady. And Smiling now I can see myself doing just as you have stated so wisely. Well done.
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