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Hello, yes this is me, I just can't take your call,

I'm on cloud nine so please leave a message.

Fingers of ecstasy walk my spine while I climb the wall,

so I promise to get to you the moment I come down.

 

 

I'll return your call when I can breathe again,

cause his kisses are taking my breath away.

He's tying my body into knots of delicious passion,

so maybe I'll just call you back another day.

 

 

Leave a message, I'm not available right now,

being that I'm a tangled mess of lust.

His tongue is doing things I can't quite explain,

well definitely not at this moment, no way, no how.

 

 

I see that you called, but there's no way I can reply.

He's blowing rapture in my ears and all I can whisper is "oh my."

My body is all contorted and entangled in this wild position,

so I can't answer you now, I'm definitely on a mission.

 

 

Girl, hit me up later, I'm busy riding this cloud of joy.

I'll get back to you later, whenever we decide to land.

Damn, he just curled my toes, oh gosh, oh boy, it's grand!

From one position to the next, he's a sexual convoy.

 

 

He's pulling my hair and my nails rake down his back,

got me singing in falsetto, and now I really can't speak.

He's licked me down to my navel and round to my crack.

Oh, wait, don't do that, Im not ready to reach my peak.

 

 

Yea, yea, I got your message, but I can't be chatting on this phone.

This man is bending my back like it has nary a bone,

got me screaming for him to never leave me alone,

but we can talk now, because the man has come and gone.

 

 

marjoriejoyceleslie

07/17/09

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  • LdyBrknWing gold member
    July 24

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    "Oh my," indeed! This was quite a roller coaster ride. Even at my age, I'm blushing. You surprised, me, though, 'cause I really thought the person you were going to get back to was maybe an ex. That would've been great, too. (But this was definitely something! lol)

    Paula


  • penman gold member
    July 20

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    Excellent

    Oh my did you so write a hot one with this poem. My goodness so very well done and arousing. Great job. Best of luck in the contest.


  • badnovocaine
    July 19
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    I liked this one, it made me smile in a good way and it doesn't seem like you have writers block at all
    Anyways this reminded me of what I couldn't write, I can't write sensual or even just sort of erotic poems, but this was good. Too good for my virgin ears (no just kidding lol)
    I loved this.


  • Denerica
    July 18
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    Speechless...my virgin ears...lol I may be Christian but I am married...I am allowed to know all this. Anyhoo...it takes passion to a higher level, clever write with the interuption of the phone...sadly men would come and have gone if you are giving the milk for free, so that was a clever ending. Blessings.

  • I enjoyed the uniqueness of this write, it is unlike anything I have read before. I find it very creative, and a fun read with a hint of erotic pleasure.

    I did find a couple nits that you might want to take a look at, I will list them for you to make it easier for you to fix them should you choose to do so:

    I'll return your call when I can breathe again,
    cause [hie] kisses are taking my breath away.

    He's licked me down to my navel and round to my crack.
    Oh, wait, don't do that, Im not ready to [reack] my peak.

    Other than those couple of nits, this was a delightful read dear and I wish you
    the best of luck in the contest.

    Suzi

  • Cleverly done.
    Good luck in the contest
    till then
    stay
    liquid


  • Angels hero
    July 17

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    Wow

    What a write. Not at all what I expected. You have held my attention through out your. I'm not sure how to comment on this write. But I will say that you took my breath away. Good luck with my contest.

  • Bob Fox
    July 17

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    My

    Damn girl take that phone off the hook. Sweat and passion needs to interference. lol Hot write . Sounds like a revival of a gloriuos past that others can only wish for....Now what a steamy picture.

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