Can it be, oh can it?
tHe butterflies
flAp their wings,
and Our likeness
stayS blackened
among The day sky -
our silHouettes
instead Reveal a
strand of Easing
silence in Sound,
in spite of cHaos
bringing in wOes...
a rule carefulLy
kept, not ignoreD.
Author notes
http://starhazy.deviantart.com/art/The-Butterfly-Silhoette-128291664
Okay. I seriously didn't think I'd be able to pull of a poem of such caliber, with only 6 hours left in this contest. I was determined to enter this contest, so this is what I was thinking: I saw the butterfly silhouette pic, and thought "Chaos theory!" when I saw the butterfly. Then, I said, "Nah, not poetic enough...how about, 'chaos threshold!?" Then: "Okay, what pattern? Something new and different...what about lines and letter alignment? YEAH!" This is what was running through my head: 14 lines, because there were 14 letters in the title. Also, 14 letters in each line. Even more - the line number's respective letter (e.g.: line 1, letter 1; line 2, letter 2) will match the number letter in the title! That is why the letters are capitalized in weird places throughout the poem. T'was a crazy idea, but I loved working on this one. And in record time of 30 minutes, I finished what I set out to do - this is one of my favorite ones. If I get a winning spot in the contest, that's fine and dandy - so is not winning anything. What's important is that I created something I think to be wonderful, and I greatly appreciate it. Thanks again, Kat! 
Hope you enjoy this as much as I do. ^.^ 
Sincerely,
--Daniel
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A contest entry
- Round 1!!!!! Click me! you know you want to by Nakatrea.
500 points, ended July 17, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
If you deem this work worthy of one, please leave a comment.
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interesting piece...a good idea with the corrrespondance. good job!
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This is AWESOME Daniel! LOVE LOVE LOVE the cool format and pattern, but love the imagery even more.
Definitely one of your best! Cryptic in a way, but hopeful too - it kept me fully engaged right to the last letter!
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Holy shit!
Talk about epic. I think you just pwnd the contest!
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Well, I might have, if I hadn't gone over the word limit. X___X Not to say that the three successive poems were worse than mine - they were all good. ^_^
I really enjoyed writing this one - glad to know you liked it.
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.... umm holy crap.
I had no idea it was so complex! I got the title in the poem... but gosh Daniel that was amazing!!!!!!
I don't even think I know what the chaos theory is, but the story you've told is beautiful.
It breaks my heart to tell you that you went over the word limit. BUT I will let it go because you put so much thought and work into this.
Your poem couldn't be any other way.
And it was what I was looking for in many ways.
To be fair to other entries this one will not win a trophy
(but I'll give you the points of an HM)
Thanks for entering Daniel. Your entry is greatly appreciated and I respect what you do.
All the best of luck in the contest
Kat
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Awwwww, dangit, there was a word limit!!! ...Ah well. I'm glad I wrote it this way, anyway. ^__^ No worries.
Normally, I would try to go back and change it to fit the requirements...but I really can't change it without breaking one of my patterns. X_x -
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just leave it. There is no way to make it 32 words.
But I will except your enthusiasm and willingness to make modifications
and take that into consideration.
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Indeed, I shall. ^_^ I thank you for taking it in anyway - I really, really enjoyed doing this one.
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^.^ I love it, you written this so beautifully. You did well on the prompt! I wish you nothing but the best in the contest Daniel! you're very talented. and this is very heartfelt. Made me smile. and hehe I just realize you use some Capitals in there when it wasn't needed unless you wanted to write like that ^^;
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