A summers day
in the shade
we have it made
Its too hot in the sun
Unless you go to the beach
it will be so much fun
Swim around
don't drown
Pick up your feet
and run
you look sexy hon
Ride that wave
be careful babe
you might end up
in your grave
Why don't children behave
as they yell at mom
in song
As she yells at Ron
and Don
They are throwing sand
at an old man
Alright it is time to go
darn we need a tow
The tires are low
they have been sliced
and the windshield has been riced
His mom found baby mice
his sister had lice
He fell
and he needs
ice
Author notes
Darlene Long
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thanks 4 the entry
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A very sweet poem with a nice sing song quality to it. I really enjoyed reading this one. I liked the simplicity of it and the steady diet of rhyme. There are a couple of grammatical errors that you might want to look at. In line 4 to should probably be too. In line 16 behaive should be behave. In line 22 it should be at an old man not a old man. Other than those small things I think this was a nice piece. Thank you so much for entering and best of luck.
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thanks for entering,
lovely rhyme.
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