it rains,
rains and rains and rains,
and each strike of lightning sends a charge of electricity to a heart that already can't cope, and the pain burns.
sometimes,
that pain is you.
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i choke,
this heart which has been electrocuted until all that remains is the ash and splinters of a fragile, scarcely protected organ. i choke and i choke,
coughing and swallowing,
i'm gasping for air, and there's no one here to care,
there's no one here to watch me die.
but i have,
slightly, a piece of me broke off and it's fallen so far into orbit, that i don't think it's really even me anymore.
i'm dying, and i'm dying alone.
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death;
an eternity alone, smothered in soil and dressed with the roots of decaying dandelions and wild daisies, there's no love with death.
--
i break,
tumble
and
crashcrashcrash
until i'm throwing myself into walls and screaming desperately at rock faces
idon'tthinkicandothisaloneanymore.
--
i know it hurts to love me,
i fall under statistics,
and i know i curve and form shapes that are too full,
too epic and eventually, i realise that it's inevitable,
i know that one day,
you just won't be able to love me anymore,
but please remember, i let you know everysinglefuckingflaw,
you were meant to know what you were letting yourself into,
but somehow, i don't think you did.
--
i am chaos,
and i promise you it hurts, feeling myself explode.
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i am broken.
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-i break,
tumble
and
crashcrashcrash
until i'm throwing myself into walls and screaming desperately at rock faces
idon'tthinkicandothisaloneanymore.
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damn that's amazing. and that is seriously exactlyyy how i feel right now.
you seriously conveyed the emotion of being lost sooo well, and just feeling the urge to give up, but knowing there's some bit of hope left.
gahhh i love your writing. :]]
-i know that one day,
you just won't be able to love me anymore
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that was seriously a punch to the gut.
and so heartwrenching, yet true.
gahhh you have brilliant mind, love!
share?
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this poem is breathtaking.
hope you're doing better<3
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ouch. Hope you feel better : )
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Your writing is always so beautiful, even when it's about the most heartbreaking subjects. I'm speechless.
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this is sad and heart-wrenching but amazingly written. i hope you're doing okay, or at least semi-okay.
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This is a beautiful write - I really like the way that this has so many diverse thoughts throughout and manages to stay coherently on track
you have some lovely imagery too - but there are a few mistakes - "lightening" should be "lightning"; and "electricuted" should be "electrocuted" - but they can be fixed easily stunning emotion!
Polly
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thanks love
i also put too many em's in remember, i keep looking over it and finding mistakes and typos.
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oh WOW
this is incredible.
so beautiful and heartbreaking and powerful
wowww.
I love your writing♥
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awwie, loniloni sweetie
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this is so heartbreaking and gorgeous.
i feel the same way.
i adore your prose♥
rememeber - remember
it's okie dear, everyone makes little spelling mistakes
i agree with dani, you're too beautiful to be broken.
i'm always here for you, love♥ -
this is a powerful piece that hits hard. like major hard
but it makes me sad what's going on chicky???
and the pain burns.
sometimes,
that pain is you.
couldn't have expressed a smack in the face anybetter!
one minor adjustment
choas-chaos
i hope you're better dearie! you're too amazing to be broken
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