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Lullaby for Desperation

A time will come
When we need you again
You aren't a stranger
But you aren't a friend

You creep around the edges
Engulf what is good
But we need you so that
We can stand where you stood

A simple lullaby is needed
To freeze you in frame
To pause your oppression
Not to stamp out your name

The future is fuzzy
The moment is pure
So sleep, desperation
Sleep, blood and gore

A time will come
When we need you again
You aren't a stranger
But you aren't a friend

Author notes

When I look at the prompt, I think of the eye of a storm. That's where I went with the poem.

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  • delightfulmess silver member
    September 2

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    Definatley has a profound effect and the background along with it makes me want to cry... Thank you so much for entering my contest. And also for your
    patience.



    Love ,
    Delila


  • ladybug.
    July 20

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    I like the repetitiveness of the first & last stanza. It works well, I believe. The rhyming is a little touchy in a couple of spots but it's overall excellent. Thanks for sharing.


  • Sonja
    July 17

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    Very interesting poem with short lines to keep ones attention on a full trill and expectation what will be on the end. Thank you and good luck.
    ~Sonja~


  • DesolatELifE
    July 17

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    I like the ot a stranger or a friend, though it's not the very most original thing to say.
    'To pause your oppression
    Not to stamp out your name' - I like that little chunk very much!

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