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Goodnight

Wrap your arms around me
Hold me to your beating heart
Whisper you love me
And promise we'll never part

Close your eyes to rest
Run your fingers through my hair
As I trace circles on your chest
And tell you how much I care

Pull me closer
And stroke my face
As you promise me forever
And I nestle into your embrace

Finally after all the talk
We settle in for the night
I close my eyes at last
You kiss me and whisper "Goodnight"

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  • Candice Bezanson
    August 20

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    I have to agree that it is a little cliche and feels a little forced HOWEVER, I know that you have to write what you feel. I think you should try a couple of piece's that don't Rhyme, You might be amazed at yourself :0) great write, thanks for sharing !


  • Jack-of-all-Colors
    August 20
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    nice write =) have you considered writing a poem without rhyme?? i feel like the rhymes are limiting this poem.


  • Xxcant runxX
    August 20
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    awh i love it


  • PatheticKt
    August 20

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    Hmm quite cliche but the lines penned here are quite lovely
    I wouldn't say it was intense imagery but I guess the reader can basically imagine the scene and emotion the persona was in; nice write, all in all